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My favorite basketball player Vince Carter, Air Canada, was one of the best dunkers in the NBA league. He could hooped, dunked and even made three points shooting, especially he was unguarded that he could dunk over other players's head if he wanted. He started his debut in Toronto Raptors team which was in Canada. Not many players wanted to be there as Raptors team was a new-start and anonymous team that was completely unattractive. Although Raptors team was a weak team at that moment, Carter still went for Canada and played the game with his cousin, Tracy Mcgrady who became one of the Hall of famers and the best scorers in the NBA league. After few years, Carter won his champion in the NBA dunk competition and even scored the full marks in his dunk performance. The most crucial thing I admire him is not only his great performance in NBA league, but also his characters. He unlikes other players that form a big and incredible team so as to win best final NBA champion. He just purely loves the basketball game even being a backup player.

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Vince Carter, Air Canada, washas been one of the best dunkers in the NBA league. He could hooped, dunked and even make three-point shooting shots, especially he was unguarded unguardable that since he could dunk over other players' head if he wanted. He started made his debut in Toronto Raptors team which was in Canada. Not many players wanted to be there as Raptors team was a newly-founded and anonymous obscure team that was completely unattractive. Although Raptors team was a weak team weak at that time, Carter still went for to Canada and played the games with his cousin, Tracy Mcgrady who later became one of the a Hall of famers and one of the best scorers in the NBA league. A few years later, Carter won his the championship in the NBA slam dunk competition contest and even scored the full marks in his dunk performance. The most crucial best things I admire about him is not only are his great performance in NBA league, but also and his characters . He unlikes is not like other players who only want to form a big and incredible team so as to win best final NBA championthe final. He just purely loves the basketball games even being as a backup reserve player.

只纠正了语法,写法用词什么的还可以进一步提高哦:)

Btw, am also a fan of Vince. Good one mate:)

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