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A car accident My job is in the five minutes of slow walking from my home so I have no need to use my car to get to it. But leaving a car in a yard doesn't prevent one from troubles. My daily work was interrupted by a telephone call from traffic police. They informed me that my car was damaged by another one on the parcikng near my home. When I came to the "crime scene" I beheld that a back of my car is crashed by a very old and shabby car, owned by... let's call them "a guest of our country from somewhere in the South". It's worth to mention that the parking was covered by snow and ice but guilty's car was with summer tires. Fortunatly my new friend had all needed documents including liability insurance. Then I spent about an hour in the office of the insurance company, and a week later a got an insurance payment.

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A Car Accident

Fortunately, even if I walk slowly, my job is within five minutes of my home, so there is no real need to take my car to get to it. However, being able to leave your car in your yard does not mean that it cannot be in an accident, which is something I found out recently when my daily work was interrupted by a telephone call from the traffic police. They calmly and politely informed me that another car had damaged mine as it was trying to park near my home.

When I arrived at the "crime scene," I saw that a very old, shabby-looking, and beat-up car, owned by (How should I say this?) “a guest from a southern country” had crashed into the back of my car. In spite of his origin, it is definitely worth mentioning that the ground, in fact, lay covered by snow and ice, but the real guilt was with the moving car’s summer tires. My new acquaintance was, surprisingly, cooperative, and had, even more surprisingly, all of the necessary documents including, to my relief, full liability insurance.

Afterwards, I then spent about an hour in the office of the insurance company, and about a week later, I received the insurance payment.

Hi,Kafka. Good job! The changes that I have made were to allow your sentences to sound more natural to my native ears, to complete and tie your thoughts together, and for ease of reading. I hope that this helps you. J.

P.S. This sounds like something your namesake, the famous writer, would use as the start of one of his books! A simple incident that then somehow blossomed into "Kafka-esque" proposition with you, the innocent party, being hauled downtown to the police station and thrown into jail!  It also is a very good use of your everyday life events as the basis of your writing! Posting a picture of your damaged vehicle would have been like the star atop a Christmas tree!   

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A car accident

My job is an easy five minute walk from my house so I do not need to drive to work and can leave my car in the yard. Unfortunately, leaving a car in the yard doesn't prevent one from having car troubles. Today I was interrupted by a telephone call from traffic police. They informed me that my car was damaged by another one in the yard. When I came to the "crime scene" I was shocked to discover that the back of my car had been crashed into by a guy in a very old and shabby car. It's worth mentioning that the parking lot was covered with snow and ice but the guy's car had summer tires. Fortunatly my new friend had all the needed documents including liability insurance.I spent about an hour in the office of the insurance company, and a week later a got an insurance payment.

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