IELTS task 1 writing
+ Please find the errors and let me know what IELTS score (out of 9) my writing will achieve .
Thanks :)
The given illustration depict information about the process of manufacturing bricks for the building industry. All in all, the process consist of various steps.
In the beginning, the earth is excavated by a digger machine in order to extract clay. Then the fine clay which is prepared by passing through the metal grid is mixed with sand and water in order to create the mixture. Next, the bricks are formed by pouring the aggregate into the mold or by a wire cutter machine. In the following step, the bricks are kept into an oven for few days under specific circumstances. First, they lose the moisture in the oven for one or two days. Then they are heated in few steps. The heating starts with 200 degrees of Celsius and continues up to 1300 degrees. Finally, the bricks are cooled down in the chamber for two or three days and in the end, they are ready for packing and delivering to the industries.
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IELTS task 1 writing
+ Please find the errors and let me know what IELTS score (out of 9) my writing will achieve .Thanks :)
The given illustration depicts information about the process of manufacturing bricks for the building industry. All in all, t [Style] The process consists of various steps [several stages - sounds more natural].
In the beginning, the earth is excavated by a digger machine in order to extract clay [for style: 'a digger is used to excavate earth, from which clay is extracted':better to avoid passive voice ('earth is excavated') ]. The next step is the fine clay, which is prepared by passing through the metal grid. [New sentence] It is then mixed with sand and water in order to create the aggregate mixture. Next, the bricks are formed by pouring the aggregate into the mould or by a wire cutter machine. In the following step, the bricks are kept into an oven for few several days under specific conditions. circumstances. First, they lose the moisture in the bricks evaporates in the oven for one or two days. Then the bricks are heated in a few steps. The heating starts at a temperature of with 200 degrees of Celsius and continues up to 1300 degrees. Finally, the bricks are cooled down in the chamber for two or three days and, in the end, they are ready for packing and delivering to the industryies.
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If they only give you a picture and there r is a process to describe out of it I would rather describe it using the chronological order of the process instead of writing a paragraph and using the vocabulary that is in front of each part of the picture
For example
1 a machine excavates the clay and trucks take it to
2 ect ...
If they want you to write an essay like paragraph then it is a different story and my idea does not apply
:))
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