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Should children be allowed to make their own choices? This is a writing question from IELTS. The question is below. Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Here is my writing: Some people believe that leaving their children to make their own choices will probably result in a society with selfish individuals, while some people think that it is significant for children to do that. I believe, children should be allowed to make their own decisions as long as they don’t affect other people’s interest. For a children’s growth, nurturing their responsibility and independence is important for their parents. Children who are given freedom to choose from what to dress and which toys to buy might to easier to form a lifelong habit of managing personal things consciously. An example of a news tells a story that a freshman in university who failed to make his bed.This taught us that developing self-management ability by their parents at an young age is essential for children’s future adulthood.In a word, there would be serious problems if they don't take their own responsibility when they are young. On the other hand, sometimes if parents neglect what crazy decisions children are making will result in children’s lack of empathy and their selfishness. What if childrens are allowed to watch soap operas and worthless TV whenever they want?Namely, without parental supervision,children might be playing loud noises of TV and eating junk food in the coach all day long, which will result in interfering their sleeping neighbours and doing harm on their own health. Or even, when they grow up, these children might become defiant and could lead to a selfish and chaotic society with people fighting for their own interests. In conclusion, it is proper for children to make their own choices as to be prepared for adult life,anyway these choices should be under the bottom line of not interfering with other’s life and freedom.

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Should children be allowed to make their own choices?

This is a writing question from IELTS. The question is below.
Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Here is my writing:
Some people believe that leaving their children to make their own choices will probably result in a society with selfish individuals, while some people think that it is significant for children to do that. I believe, children should be allowed to make their own decisions as long as they don’t affect other people’s interests.
For a children’s child's growth, nurturing their responsibility and independence is important for their parents. Children who are given freedom to choose from what how to dress and which toys to buy might to find it easier to form a lifelong habit of managing personal things consciously. An example of a piece of news tells a story that of a freshman in university who failed to make his bed.This taught us that developing self-management ability by their parents at an young age is essential for children’s future adulthood.In a word, there would be serious problems if they don't take their own responsibility when they are young.
On the other hand, sometimes if parents neglect what crazy decisions that children are making this will result in children’s lack of empathy and their selfishness. What if childrens are allowed to watch soap operas and worthless TV whenever they want?Namely, without parental supervision,children might be playing loud noises of TV noisily and eating junk food (in the coach???) all day long, which will result in interfering annoying their sleeping neighbours and doing harm on to their own health. Or even, when they grow up, these children might become defiant and could lead to a selfish and chaotic society with people fighting for their own interests.
In conclusion, it is proper for children to make their own choices so as to be prepared for adult life,anyway However, these choices should be under the bottom line of not interfering with other’s life and freedom.


Lots of very nice vocabulary and expressions like- nurturing, lifelong habit, future adulthood, in a word, namely, etc.

The one i liked best was 'It is proper for children to...'

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