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Writing task 2 about the following topic: A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Here is my writing: Most of the people pursue success, but only few know what does it mean to be successful. indeed, a promising job and a big house are valued by the society. However, the importance of honesty, kindness and inner peace should not be underestimated. As a matter of fact, people don't need too much material possessions to live on a life. Still, why do so many people long for luxurious products? In my opinion, people want to be respected and enjoy the privilege comes along with the fancy logos. To achieve such goals, people work hard, seek chances to make as much money as possible. At the end of a day, when they are alone, they might still feel empty inside. According to Maslow's hierarchy of needs, the highest level is self-actualisation. People will follow their hearts, instead of the ideas presented by the mainstream. By acting spontaneously, people could be happier than simply chasing for money or fame. However, people can never get rid of interactions with others. After all, we are social animals. Man is born free, but everywhere he/she is in chains. We are bong to family, friends and responsibilities. It's important to find a well-paid job, so people can support themselves and their beloved ones. Therefore, a reliable college can relieve the workload and increase efficiency. He/She could be trust-worthy, kind and honour. All of these are valuable personalities, which should never be neglected. In conclusion, the humanity shining points such honesty and kindness should always be valued. Apart from being wealthy, there are more than one way to be respected and cherished.

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Writing task 2

about the following topic:
A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important.

to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?


Here is my writing:

Most of the people pursue success, but only few know what does it means to be successful. Indeed, a promising job and a big house are valued by the society. However, the importance of honesty, kindness and inner peace should not be underestimated.

As a matter of fact, people don't need too much many material possessions to live on a their life lives. Still, why do so many people long for luxurious products? In my opinion, people want to be respected and enjoy the privilege that comes along with the fancy logos. To achieve such goals, people work hard, seek chances to make as much money as possible. At the end of a day, when they are alone, they might still feel empty inside.

According to Maslow's hierarchy of needs, the highest level is self-actualisation. People will follow their hearts, instead of the ideas presented by the mainstream. By acting spontaneously, people could be happier than simply chasing for money or fame.

However, people can never get rid of interactions with others. After all, we are social animals. Man is born free, but everywhere he/she is in chains everywhere. We are bong? bonded? to family, friends and responsibilities. It's important to find a well-paid job, so people can support themselves and their beloved ones. Therefore, a reliable college can relieve the workload and increase efficiency.(not sure of the meaning/relevance of this sentence) He/She could be trust-worthy, kind and full of honour. All of these are valuable personalities personality traits, which should never be neglected.

In conclusion, the humanity's shining points such honesty and kindness should always be valued. Apart from being wealthy, there are is more than one way to be respected and cherished.

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