How My Envious Character Has Been Changed (Please correct my grammar)
Sometimes I saw that one people envied another ones due to many reasons (in a negative way), and I wasn't an exception until I got 20 of age. It's horrible to envy, just because somebody's mind is always obsessed with thoughts to make another person hurt, ruin his or her ideas, make fun of the person; that man often imagine that the person gets no more... well, there are such people in the world. They are always nervous and paranoid, and easy lose their mental health.
But I got a solution. I just took a look at myself and asked only one question: "What's wrong with me that make me worse in comparison to that person?" In other words, I got sincere to myself. In most cases the problem isn't in those who we envy. They often get or already have something that we haven't had. Sometimes we can get the same things too. Envying people who are better at something than you, we just hate them rather than develop our own skills at the same field and think of our own lives.
Forget it, you better think of how you can get better.
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How My Envious Character Has Changed (Please correct my grammar)
Sometimes I saw people envy* due to several reasons (all of them negative), and I was no exception until I got to the age of 20. It's horrible to envy*, just because our mind is obsessed with thoughts to make someone hurt, ruin his or her ideas, make fun of them; to begrudge them more ... well, there are such people in the world. They are always nervous and paranoid, and easily lose their mental health.But I have a solution. I just look at myself and ask the question: "What's wrong with me that makes me worse than them?" In other words, I became sincere to myself. In most cases the problem isn't in those who we envy. They often get or already have something that we haven't had. Sometimes we can get the same things too. Envying people who are better at something than us, we just hate them rather than develop our own skill in the same field and think of our own lives.
Forget it, you had better think of how you can get better, yourself.
*Instead of the verb (here), it is also ok to use the abstract noun "envy" as you are talking about an idea. Incidentally, all abstract nouns in English are lower case: envy, greed, sloth, fury, charity, faith, ...
Very well written!
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How My Envious Character Has Changed (Please correct my grammar)
Your writing is uncorrectable, because it is disjointed. (look in a dictionary for disjointed).1) "would it not be better, to 'live and let live' ? "
2 ) "sometimes I get so envious of another person for no reason."
3 ) "until the age of twenty I used to get so jealous of people".
4 ) "Always thinking of ways to hurt another person".
5 ) "why do we hate them rather than --- --- ------- -(you need to fill this part)"
6 ) "It was then that I found a solution to my problems"
7 ) "There are unfortunately other people like myself, in this world. People with mental problems".
8 ) "At the age of twenty I finally matured and grew into a mature young lady".
9 ) "if you think ------ (you fill in this bit) "
10 )"Always envying people who have more than us, or are more skilled than ourselves"
11 ) "Then forget it because ------ (you also fill in this bit) "
Your homework, with or without your teachers. Is to put these sentences into the correct order to make your story and fill in the blank areas. And to use the correct grammar connectors to maintain a flow in you story.
Whilst bearing in mind you are trying to not be disjointed.
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In other words, I got honest with myself.
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I've read somewhere that when you envy someone it means you are willing to take that person's fate. Unconsciously or in clear mind you want to live that person's life knowing nothing about the person. People tend to notice only someone's success and never think what's behind it.
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