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JUST A DIARY ENTRY ON Oct.17th I would like someone to correct my diary entry( or to tell me the natural way of saying some things below. But I would be glad even if you JUST CORRECT my entry) I was wondering if you could do that for me, please? JUST A DIARY ENTRY ON Oct.17th I bought Nintendo Switch last month on Amazon, I had been wanted this kind of game because my friends have it and told me that it is totally entertaining. The kind of game help our lifestyle to be better, yes it is possibly much more saying but I am thinking it is true, of course. The switch has two controllers to play video games in just only one the switch, you know? This point is really attractive to me. We had to bring the video game we have like Gameboy in many years before, but now, thanks to Nintendo Switch, we are able to play the video game if someone have just one Nintendo Switch. And there is another reason why I am thinking it is so attractive game to Switch. I can play like Mario Cart or Smash Borthers, something like that on bed, or in the style of lay. Up to now, when I want to play Mario cart, we have to turn on Wii.

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Adding on Ms. Mina's correction above

I bought a Nintendo Switch last month on Amazon, I had been wanted wanting this kind of game because my friends have it and told me that it is totally entertaining. The This kind of game help our lifestyles to be better, yes it is possibly much more saying (not sure what you mean here?) but I am thinking it is true, of course. The switch has two controllers to play video games in just only one the switch When you buy a Nintendo Switch, you get two controllers, you know? This point is really attractive to me. We had to bring the video game we have like Gameboy in many years before, but now, thanks to Nintendo Switch, we are able to play the video game together if someone have has just one Nintendo Switch. And there is another reason why I am thinking it is so attractive game to Switch. I can play games such as Mario Cart or Smash Brothers, something like that on my bed, or just lying down or in the style of lay. Up to now, when I wanted to play Mario cart, we have had to turn on the Wii.

Hope I made it better!

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Hello, thank you for sharing your diary entry with us :). I have made a few corrections, I hope it helps.


JUST A DIARY ENTRY ON Oct.17th

I bought a Nintendo Switch last month on Amazon, I had been wanted wanting this kind of game because my friends have it and told me that it is totally entertaining. The This kind of game help our lifestyles to be better, yes it is possibly much more saying (not sure what you mean here?) but I am thinking it is true, of course. The switch has two controllers to play video games in just only one the switch (hm..again, I don't know what you mean), you know? This point is really attractive to me. We had to bring the video game we have like Gameboy in many years before, but now, thanks to Nintendo Switch, we are able to play the video game if someone have has just one Nintendo Switch. And there is another reason why I am thinking it is so attractive game to Switch (?). I can play games such as Mario Cart or Smash Borthers, something like that on my bed, or just lying down or in the style of lay. Up to now, when I wanted to play Mario cart, we have had to turn on the Wii.
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JUST A DIARY ENTRY ON Oct.17th(Writing about Nintendo Switch) I bought a Nintendo Switch last month on Amazon, I had been wanting this kind of game because my friends have it and told me that it is totally entertaining. This kind of game help our lifestyles to be better. When you buy a Nintendo Switch, you get two controllers, you know? We had to bring the video game we have like Gameboy in many years before, but now, thanks to Nintendo Switch, we are able to play the video game if someone has just one Nintendo Switch. And there is another reason why I am thinking it is so attractive game . I can play games such as Mario cart or Smash brothers, something like that on my bed, or just lying down. Up to now, when I wanted to play Marion Cart, we had to turn on the Wii.

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