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About Poverty Today's theme at the online English lesson was poverty. How can we get rid of poverty from the world? There are many reasons that poverty exists in the world. For example, history of colony, premature of government, a stratified society might cause poverty. I think that development of technology and redistribution of wealth may be one of the solutions for this problem. First, development of technology has been increasing productivity. We already have enough foods, cloth and water. Moreover development information technology will decrease various cost of communication, finance, medical and etc. Second, I think redistribution of wealth is need to solve the problem. Most of wealth in the world concentrate in a few people. Although economic grows, only a few people will become more rich and most of poor people will be same. We already have tax program for redistribution in each county, however we need more strong redistribution program. Would you please check my sentences? Thank you.

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About Poverty

Today's theme at  in my the online English lesson was poverty. How can we get rid of poverty from in the world? There are many reasons that poverty exists globally/the world over/around the world/all over the world in the world. For example, a history of colony, a premature of government, or a stratified society might cause poverty. I think that the development of technology and redistribution of wealth may be one two (These are two separate solutions as explained in your essay.) of the solutions for to this problem.

First, the development of technology has been increasing productivity. We already have enough foods, clothes/clothing and water. Moreover, the advancement/development of information technology will decrease various costs of communication, finance, medicines, medical and etc. (Please don't put "and" before "etc." to avoid redundancy.) 

Second, I think the redistribution of wealth is needed to solve the problem. Most of the wealth in the world is concentrated in a few people/Most of the wealth in the world is concentrated in the hands of a few people. Although the economy economic grows, only a few people will become more richer, and most of poor people will be the same. We already have tax programs for wealth redistribution in each country, ; however, we need more stronger ones ("Ones" refers to "tax programs." You don't need to repeat the same words.) redistribution program.

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About Poverty

Today's theme at the online English lesson was poverty.
How can we get rid of poverty from the world?
There are many reasons that poverty exists in the world.
For example, history of colony, premature of government, a stratified society might cause poverty.
I think that development of technology and redistribution of wealth may be one of the solutions for this problem.
First, development of technology has been increasing productivity. We already have enough foods, cloth and water.
Moreover development information technology development will decrease various cost of communication, finance, medical and etc.
Second, I think redistribution of wealth is need needed to solve the problem.
Most of wealth in the world concentrate in a few people.
Although economic grows, only a few people will become more rich richer and most of poor people will be the same.
We already have tax program for redistribution in each county, however we need more strong redistribution program.

Would you please check my sentences?
Thank you.

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