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When we were in the Tokyo Disney Resort My friend and I went to the Tokyo Diney Resort last weekend.

We took the express train( which called Shinkansen) from Osaka to Tokyo and the local train to TDR.

We decided to go to the TDL first because the weather forecast said it would be rainy these two days but heavier on Sunday.

We wanted to see the Cinderella castle clearly,that's why we went to the TDL first.

As the weather forecast said, it was raining around noon but it stopped right after we finished the attraction.

We were like, "How lucky we are!" "Rather I can see the sun!"

Moreover, it was hot day after stopped raining.

We were very happy and playful.

We enjoyed till close and went back to the hotel to sleep.

Next day, we went to the TDS.

It supposed to be rainy but actually it was cloudy a hole day.

I like the TDS atractions more because there are exciting and bit thrill attractions more than TDL.

There is also very different atmosphere in the TDS.

We were on a paradise at beginning and end.

However first we have to get out from the paradise.

It can't be long enough to see sweet dreams,but I am really happy to come back to the TDR again because it was after 5 years since I went there last time, and it was still my 3rd time to be there.

This our trip, we had kind of luck for the weather.

I don't know would that be same next time. haha

Thank you for reading.

Please check my sentence!!

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When we were in the at Tokyo Disney Resort

My friend and I went to the Tokyo Disney Resort last weekend.

We took the express train (which is called Shinkansen) from Osaka to Tokyo and the local train to TDR.

We decided to go to the TDL first because the weather forecast said it would be rainy these two days but heavier on Sunday.

We wanted to see the Cinderella castle clearly, that's why we went to the TDL first.

As the weather forecast said, it was raining around noon but it stopped right after we finished visiting the attraction.

We were like, "How lucky we are!" "Rather I can see the sun!" ? (Finally I can see the sun)

Moreover, it was a hot day after it stopped raining.

We were very happy and playful. excited (normally we say in a playful mood)

We enjoyed till closing time and went back to the hotel to sleep.

Next day, we went to the TDS.

It was supposed to be rainy but actually it was cloudy a whole day.

I prefer like the TDS atractions more because there are they were more exciting and bit thrilling attractions more than TDL.

There is was also a very different atmosphere in the at TDS.

We were on a paradise at from the beginning to the end.

However at first we have had to get out of from the paradise.

It can't be long enough We didn't have enough time to see sweet dreams, but I am really happy to come back to the TDR again because it was after 5 years 5 years have passed since I went there last time, and it was still only my 3rd time to be there.

This our trip, we had kind of luck for the weather were lucky with the weather.

I don't know would that would be the same next time. haha

Thank you for reading.

Please check my sentence!!

TDS: I assume it's a name of a place like Tokyo, you go to Tokyo but not go to the Tokyo.

Typing mistake: After . or , please allow one spacebar. For example: That is good. I'd like to come back, and see you again. Not like this: That is good.I'd like to come back,and see you again.

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