A paragraph from a short story I'm working on
I was about five minutes away from home when my eyes caught something in the gutter. It was merely a green dot when I spotted it from the distance. But as I walked toward it, it infallibly got bigger and more discernible to my eyes. Then, I sensed a slightest hint of ominousness from the dot that now had gotten as big as a golf ball, and it made me hesitant to step any closer. It was as if I was in darkness drifting to the way out that looked like ball-shaped white fog hovering in midair, knowing that something uncertain was over there. It was something that, I could guess, I would do anything to sidestep and pretend it never existed.
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A paragraph from a short story I'm working on
I was about five minutes away from home when my eyes caught something in the gutter. It was merely a green dot when I spotted it from the a distance, but as I walked toward it, it infallibly got unfailingly bigger and more discernible to my eyes. Then, I sensed a slightest hint of ominousness from I began to feel a slight hint of foreboding as the dot that now had gotten as big as a golf ball, and it made me hesitant to step any closer. It was as if I was in darkness drifting toward the way out that looked like a ball-shaped cloud of white fog hovering in midair, knowing that something uncertain was over there. The fog cloaked It was something that, I could guess, I would do anything to sidestep and pretend it never existed.This is a really fun passage - very mysterious! Because this is creative writing, I took some creative liberties to edit for clarity and graceful transitions in addition to English grammar. I hope I interpreted your writing correctly! I look forward to reading more from you :)
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