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E-MAIL Hi Sarah , I am writing ,because I need to ask for information about holiday and I have got a lot of travel preferences. First of all, my family and I prefer going Kenya,because in this place there are the best safari in the world.In addition,my sister-in-law was in last year and she recommended us this place.Also,my children are keen on animals. Second,I know Kenya is much more expensive than others places.We are going to go four persons: my husband, I ,my daughter and my son.I need to know the prices ,because my sister-in -law spoke me about 1200€,for person. Third,My family and I would like to be in a hotel,because it is much comfortable than apartment.In addition we will go to the hotel to rest ,sleep and have a shower.We will be in Kenya about one week. Four,we want travelling in a plane,because it is shorter than othetrs transportation.Last week I was looking in Internet and It takes me about eight weeks to get from Madrid to Nairobi.In my opinion is a lot of time.

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Hi Sarah ,
I am writing ,because I need to ask for information about holiday the holidays and I have got a lot of travel preferences.

First of all, my family and I prefer going want to go to Kenya, (remove comma) because in this place there are they have the best safaris in the world. In addition (Sugges Also instead of In addition), last year my sister-in-law was there in last year and she recommended us this place to us. Also And, my children are keen on animals!


Second, I know Kenya is much more expensive than others places. We are going to go four persons There will be four of us traveling: my husband, I ,my daughter, and my son and myself. I need to know the prices, because my sister-in -law spoke me said it would be about 1200€,(remove comma) for each person.


Third, M my family and I would like to be stay in a hotel, because it is much more comfortable than an apartment. In addition (more natural) we will also go to the hotel to rest, sleep(rest and sleep, about the same, I'd take one out)  and have a shower. We will be in Kenya about one week.

Your sentences are good, I just make some changes to make them sound more natural. Watch the spaces. Do not put a space before a comma but DO put a space after every comma and period. Nice work!



Four,we want travelling in a plane,because it is shorter than othetrs transportation.Last week I was looking in Internet and It takes me about eight weeks to get from Madrid to Nairobi.In my opinion is a lot of time.

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