Closing and re-opening the border between Brazil and Venezuela
Last week, a Brazil's federal judge ordered the closing of the border between the Brazilian state of Roraima and Venezuela. The border was closed for fifteen hours and was re-opened after the decision of an associate judge, who considered the decision of the previous judge inadimissible considering the international treaties which Brazil takes part.
That was not the first attempt to undermine the presence of Venezuelans in the state. Previously, the governor of Roraima determined that only Venezuelans with a valid passport could have access to public services such as public health care system and education. In practice, that means that nobody who came from that country as a refugee would have access to any public service, since the vast majority of the Venezuelans who get to the country arrive without documents or with them overdue. The justification for such measures is that the big amount of Venezuelans in the state is overwhelming public services and bringing social problems.
According to the minister of Supreme Court of Brazil, protecting refugees is something inherited to the legal framework in Brazil and it's depicted by the vast amount of treaties about the subject which Brazil takes part and, because of that, the country couldn't prevent refugees of getting into the country.
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Closing and re-opening the border between Brazil and Venezuela
Last week, a Brazil's federal judge ordered the closing of the border between the Brazilian state of Roraima and Venezuela. The border was closed for fifteen hours and was re-opened after the decision of an associate judge, who considered the decision of the previous judge inadimissible considering the international treaties which Brazil takes part.That was not the first attempt to undermine the presence of Venezuelans in the state. Previously, the governor of Roraima determined that only Venezuelans with a valid passport could have access to public services such as public health care system and education. In practice, that means that nobody who came from that country as a refugee would have access to any public service, since the vast majority of the Venezuelans who get to the country arrive without documents or with them overdue. The justification for such measures is that the big amount of Venezuelans in the state is overwhelming public services and bringing social problems.
According to the minister of Supreme Court of Brazil, protecting refugees is something inherited to the legal framework in Brazil and it's depicted by the vast amount of treaties about the subject which Brazil takes part and, because of that, the country couldn't prevent refugees of getting into the country.
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The closing and re-opening of the border between Brazil and Venezuela
Last week a Brazilian federal judge ordered the closing of the border between the Brazilian state of Roraima and Venezuela. The border was closed for fifteen hours but was re-opened after the decision of an associate judge who considered the decision of the previous judge inadmissible, because of the international treaties Brazil has agreed to.
This was not the first attempt to control the presence of Venezuelans in the state. Previously, the governor of Roraima determined that only Venezuelans with a valid passport could have access to public services such as the public health care system and education. In practice, this meant that no one who came from Venezuela as a refugee would have access to any public services, since the vast majority of the Venezuelans who enter the country arrive without the proper documents, or documents that have not expired. The justification for such measures was that the sheer numbers of Venezuelans in the state was overwhelming public services and causing social problems, as well.
According to the minister of the Supreme Court of Brazil, however, protecting refugees is something that is inherent to the legal framework of Brazil which is depicted by the vast amount of treaties Brazil has agreed to on the subject. Because of these agreements, the country couldn't prevent refugees from entering into the country legally.
Your writing is very good. Well done! Keep up the good work :-)
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