Friends. Blessing or malediction I remember my mother saying to me that to drink alcohool and smoke is not healthy. So I've always runned away from that things in my life. When I was teenager, I had

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Friends. Blessing or malediction I remember my mother saying to me that to drink alcohool and smoke is not healthy. So I've always runned away from that things in my life. When I was teenager, I had a friend who smoked marijuana. Yes. It is true. I remember that we were walking aroung the neighborhood, she took something from her pocket and offered to me. I didn't know what was that, she explained to me but I didn't wanted to try. THANKS MOM ♥ The point is, Who have you chosen to be your friend? Is you friend blessing or malediction? I had two kind of friends in my entire life. The ones who likes to make things correctly and the other who likes to choose the wrong path. I've never seen both stealing but I remember seen my friend using drugs. There is a quote which says "love is just beautiful, when we find someone who become us to better than we are". I believe that this quote fits, too, for friends. I've always said to my friends that we have to be always blessing in the others life. I would be ashamed if I know that I leave someone to the wrongly path. I've heard that we are a little of people who we live and I know that friends are included in that. If you choose good people to be your friends, you probably become good, too. Because there is a big probability of you to walk in the same good path. On the other hand, if you choose people who don't like to choose the good path, you will probably have problems soon. Our parents instruct us about the right and the wrong path, but to choose them depends on our character and what we want to the future of our lives. I've always wanted to be bless to people who are around me and I would not like to know that anyone choose the wrong path by influence of my words or behavior. Love is just beautiful when we find someone who transform us in something better than we are.

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Friends. Blessing or malediction curse

I remember my mother saying to me that to drink alcohol and smoke is not healthy. So I've always run ("runned" is not a word - present "run", past "ran", past participle "run") away from those (plural) things in my life.
When I was a teenager, I had a friend who smoked marijuana. Yes. It is true.
I remember that we were walking around the neighborhood, and she took something from her pocket and offered to me. I didn't know what it was, she explained it to me but I didn't want to try. THANKS MOM ♥ (If you already have "didn't", which is in past, you don't need the word after to be in past, just put it in present)
The point is, Who have you chosen to be your friend? Is you friend a blessing or curse?
I had two kinds of friends in my entire life. The ones who likes to do things correctly and the others who likes to choose the wrong path. I've never seen either (both is for positive sentences, either for negative ones. e.g. - I've seen both steal. I've never seen either steal.) stealing but I remember seeing my friend using drugs.
There is a quote which says "love is just beautiful, when we find someone who makes us become better than we are".
I believe that this quote fits, too, for friends.
I've always said to my friends that we have to be always a blessing in the others life. I would be ashamed if I know that I leave someone to the wrongly path.
I've heard that we are a little of people who we live (this doesn't sound right, but I'm not sure what you mean) and I know that friends are included in that. If you choose good people to be your friends, you probably become good, too. Because there is a big probability for you to walk in the same good path.
On the other hand, if you choose people who don't like to choose the good path, you will probably have problems soon.
Our parents instruct us about the right and the wrong path, but to choose them depends on our character and what we want for the future of our lives.
I've always wanted to be a blessing to people who are around me and I would not like to know that anyone chooses the wrong path by the influence of my words or behavior.
Love is just beautiful when we find someone who transforms us in something better than we are.

Great job! I think that part of the reason no one corrected it soon is because it's so long; people look at it and decide it will take too much time to correct it. Write shorter things, or post them in two parts, and I think that will help them get corrected faster.

Olá Heriberto! Esse negocio do padrão é mto verdadeiro! Vou prestar mais atenção nisso quando eu estiver lendo um livro em inglês. Muito obrigada pelas dicas!!

Hello, Loren! I think you can express yourself better in writing. Your post sounds like a Brazilian writing. Oi, Loren. Acho melhor escrever em português mesmo. :-P Pelo que tenho estudado, a escrita em inglês segue um padrão diferente da forma como escrevemos em português. Eu consigo entender o que você quis dizer, mas talvez fique difícil para um nativo compreender algumas sutilezas. Por isso a gente tem que escolher as palavras mais adequadas ao contexto que expressem melhor os sentimentos e intenções que queremos passar. 1 - "I remember my mother saying to me that to drink alcohool and smoke is not healthy." Eu escreveria: When I was a teenager, my mother used to advise me that drinking and smoking were not healthy. - Na minha opinião uma estória começa melhor com WHEN I WAS ..., A FEW YEARS AGO..., etc. - TO SAY não é um verbo que expressa bem a intenção da sua mãe, TO ADVISE se encaixa melhor. - O padrão USED TO se encaixa bem aqui também porque acredito que sua mãe tinha o hábito de sempre te avisar sobre os malefícios dos hábitos de beber e fumar. 2 - "So I've always runned away from that things in my life." Eu escreveria: Since then I've been avoiding these unhealthy habits. É um pouco complicado de explicar. -SINCE and UNTIL são tipo uns marcadores de início e fim de períodos de tempos, por isso combinam bastante com os perfect tenses. SINCE THEN quer dizer DESDE ENTÃO. -Não tenho certeza se RUN AWAY tem o mesmo sentido de evitar ao máximo, por isso prefiro usar o AVOID. -O padrão "I've been avoiding" enfatiza que você evitou e continua evitando beber e fumar. -Sempre fui aconselhado a não utilizar palavras básicas (GOOD, BAD, VERY, THING) com muita frequência, por isso para escrita prefiro utilizar palavras mais polidas e expressões conhecidas. UNHEALTHY HABITS colocada aqui deixa a frase mais madura eu acho. É sempre bom tentar encontrar as palavras certas, principalmente os adjetivos. Já escrevi demais. Tchau!!

No one corrected my essay... sad :(

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