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Creative writing practice: Pretend to be someone else I wonder how much longer I can hold on like this. I'm just exhausted, both emotionally and physically. And in the end, what is it all for? I’m underpaid and overworked. I can't remember a day when I didn't feel angry,disappointed, or frustrated. But let me start from the beginning. My name is Gino, I’m 64 years old, and if someone told me years ago that I was going to be an orthopedic surgeon somewhere in the Dolomites, I would have never believed them. Needless to say, my life hasn’t turned out the way I wanted it to. I’m the fourth of five brothers, and I was born and raised in a two-story house in a small village in Puglia, southern Italy. I remember my childhood and teenage years as the best time of my life: I had a lot of friends, played sports, used to go to the seaside from May to October, and I had the most terrific family one could ever ask for. But then, one day, I turned 18. I suddenly had to figure out what I wanted to do with my life. I had always got top marks,and my dad was a doctor, so med school was the obvious choice. The sight of blood had always made me squeamish, but it didn’t take long to get over it. So I got into med school, boarded with a family, and it didn’t take long to graduate. I had no idea what lay ahead of me. And how could I?

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Again, excellent. No errors really, beyond a couple of missed spaces around punctuation.

Things to think about, though: My name is Gino. Better to full stop there, and avoid a comma splice, though you see them everywhere. I'd advise having another look at when to use colons and semi-colons. "One" as a personal pronoun now is very dated, so I've suggested a change to "anyone". Position of "never" is not wrong, but is not strong either. There's lots about this, including https://www.englishforums.com/English/WouldNeverWouldNever/dcjrg/post.htm. I've suggested moving "suddenly" up to open the sentence, but that's only a style suggestion, not a marker for an error.  It's worth keeping a sharp eye out for unintended repetition: "it didn’t take long" turns up twice in close proximity.

Creative writing practice: Pretend to be someone else

I wonder how much longer I can hold on like this. I'm just exhausted, both emotionally and physically.
And in the end, what is it all for? I’m underpaid and overworked. I can't remember a day when I didn't feel angry, disappointed, or frustrated.
But let me start from the beginning.
My name is Gino.  I’m 64 years old, and if someone told me years ago that I was going to be an orthopedic surgeon somewhere in the Dolomites, I would never have believed them. Needless to say, my life hasn’t turned out the way I wanted it to.
I’m the fourth of five brothers, and I was born and raised in a two-story house in a small village in Puglia, southern Italy. I remember my childhood and teenage years as the best time of my life. I had a lot of friends, played sports, used to go to the seaside from May to October, and I had the most terrific family anyone could ever ask for. But then, one day, I turned 18. Suddenly I had to figure out what I wanted to do with my life. I had always got top marks, and my dad was a doctor, so med school was the obvious choice. The sight of blood had always made me squeamish, but it didn’t take long to get over it. So I got into med school, boarded with a family, and it didn’t take long to graduate.
I had no idea what lay ahead of me. And how could I?
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Creative writing practice: Pretend to be someone else

I wonder how much longer I can hold on like this. I'm just exhausted, both emotionally and physically.
And in the end, what is it all for? I’m underpaid and overworked. I can't remember a day when I didn't feel angry,disappointed, or frustrated.
But let me start from the beginning.
My name is Gino, I’m 64 years old, and if someone told me years ago that I was going to be an orthopedic surgeon somewhere in the Dolomites, I would have never believed them. Needless to say, my life hasn’t turned out the way I wanted it to.
I’m the fourth of five brothers, and I was born and raised in a two-story house in a small village in Puglia, southern Italy. I remember my childhood and teenage years as the best time of my life: I had a lot of friends, played sports, used to go to the seaside from May to October, and I had the most terrific family one could ever ask for. But then, one day, I turned 18. I suddenly had to figure
out what I wanted to do with my life. I had always earned top marks,and my dad was a doctor, so med school was the obvious choice. The sight of blood had always made me squeamish, but it didn’t take long to get over it. So I got into med school, boarded with a family, and it didn’t take long to graduate.
I had no idea what lay ahead of me. And how could I?

This is very well written! Nicely done! :-)

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I’m the fourth of five brothers. and I was born and raised in a two-story village house of in a small village in Puglia, southern Italy. I remember my childhood and teenage years as the best time of my life: I had a lot of Many friends, played sports, used to go to the seaside from and every May to October, going to the seaside.  and I had the most terrific My family is terrific. I cannot  one could ever ask for more. But then Suddenly one day, I turned 18 and this stranger of what-to-do-with-my-life came barging in. I suddenly had to figure
out what I wanted to do with my life
. I had always got had top marks,_and my dad was a doctor -- so Med school was the obvious choice.  However, in the beginning, this was naught to me -- for the sight of blood had always makes me squeamish. No matter, , but it didn’t take long to get overcome  it. So I got into Med school I went and boarded with a family.  Time whizzed by, and it didn’t take long to graduation was at my doorstep.


I had no idea what lays ahead of me. And How could I? I don't have an accurate pack of Tarot Cards! 

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An excellent piece.  My so-called corrections are just an edit to liven your piece further.

I wonder how much longer I can hold on like this. I'm just exhausted, both emotionally and physically.  And In the end, for what is it all for? I’m underpaid and overworked and underpaid. /I can't remember/Nary a day passes when I didn't feel anger ,_disappointment, or frustration and finally resentment.  Good Intro!

But So allow let me start from the beginning.

My name is Gino. I’m 64 years old, and if someone told me years ago that I was going to be an orthopedic surgeon somewhere in the Dolomites, I would have never believed them. Needless to say, my life hasn’t turned out the way I wanted it to be. 

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You are 64 years old and still learning English, I am giving you props for doing that. You inspired me to learn English!

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