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Again, excellent. No errors really, beyond a couple of missed spaces around punctuation.
Things to think about, though: My name is Gino. Better to full stop there, and avoid a comma splice, though you see them everywhere. I'd advise having another look at when to use colons and semi-colons. "One" as a personal pronoun now is very dated, so I've suggested a change to "anyone". Position of "never" is not wrong, but is not strong either. There's lots about this, including https://www.englishforums.com/English/WouldNeverWouldNever/dcjrg/post.htm. I've suggested moving "suddenly" up to open the sentence, but that's only a style suggestion, not a marker for an error. It's worth keeping a sharp eye out for unintended repetition: "it didn’t take long" turns up twice in close proximity.
Creative writing practice: Pretend to be someone else
I wonder how much longer I can hold on like this. I'm just exhausted, both emotionally and physically.And in the end, what is it all for? I’m underpaid and overworked. I can't remember a day when I didn't feel angry, disappointed, or frustrated.
But let me start from the beginning.
My name is Gino. I’m 64 years old, and if someone told me years ago that I was going to be an orthopedic surgeon somewhere in the Dolomites, I would never have believed them. Needless to say, my life hasn’t turned out the way I wanted it to.
I’m the fourth of five brothers, and I was born and raised in a two-story house in a small village in Puglia, southern Italy. I remember my childhood and teenage years as the best time of my life. I had a lot of friends, played sports, used to go to the seaside from May to October, and I had the most terrific family anyone could ever ask for. But then, one day, I turned 18. Suddenly I had to figure out what I wanted to do with my life. I had always got top marks, and my dad was a doctor, so med school was the obvious choice. The sight of blood had always made me squeamish, but it didn’t take long to get over it. So I got into med school, boarded with a family, and it didn’t take long to graduate.
I had no idea what lay ahead of me. And how could I?
Creative writing practice: Pretend to be someone else
I wonder how much longer I can hold on like this. I'm just exhausted, both emotionally and physically.And in the end, what is it all for? I’m underpaid and overworked. I can't remember a day when I didn't feel angry,disappointed, or frustrated.
But let me start from the beginning.
My name is Gino, I’m 64 years old, and if someone told me years ago that I was going to be an orthopedic surgeon somewhere in the Dolomites, I would have never believed them. Needless to say, my life hasn’t turned out the way I wanted it to.
I’m the fourth of five brothers, and I was born and raised in a two-story house in a small village in Puglia, southern Italy. I remember my childhood and teenage years as the best time of my life: I had a lot of friends, played sports, used to go to the seaside from May to October, and I had the most terrific family one could ever ask for. But then, one day, I turned 18. I suddenly had to figure
out what I wanted to do with my life. I had always earned top marks,and my dad was a doctor, so med school was the obvious choice. The sight of blood had always made me squeamish, but it didn’t take long to get over it. So I got into med school, boarded with a family, and it didn’t take long to graduate.
I had no idea what lay ahead of me. And how could I?
This is very well written! Nicely done! :-)
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I had no idea what lays ahead of me. And How could I? I don't have an accurate pack of Tarot Cards!
An excellent piece. My so-called corrections are just an edit to liven your piece further.
I wonder how much longer I can hold on like this. I'm just exhausted, both emotionally and physically. And In the end, for what is it all for? I’m underpaid and overworked and underpaid. /I can't remember/Nary a day passes when I didn't feel anger ,_disappointment, or frustration and finally resentment. Good Intro!
But So allow let me start from the beginning.My name is Gino. I’m 64 years old, and if someone told me years ago that I was going to be an orthopedic surgeon somewhere in the Dolomites, I would have never believed them. Needless to say, my life hasn’t turned out the way I wanted it to be.
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