My hometown I come from Hanoi. It is a big city, and also the capital of Vietnam. Hanoi is famous for rich and historic culture. You can see some ancient towns or old pagodas and temples easily. When

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Carolina Ruby

My hometown I come from Hanoi. It is a big city, and also the capital of Vietnam. Hanoi is famous for rich and historic culture. You can see some ancient towns or old pagodas and temples easily. When you travel to Hanoi, you cannot try the Hanoi cuisine. The traditional dishes are very awesome, so it is so shame if you don't eat food in Hanoi. Beside the old and ancient towns, pagodas and temples, Hanoi has a lot of skycrapers, cinema, park, exciting entertainment services, and etc. Hanoi is a wonderful place you should travel in your holiday. ( Note: The Vietnamese girls are very beautiful and hospitable, especially the girls from Hanoi. If you want to make a friend with one of the Hanoi girl, you can add me. Thank you so much if you add friend with me. I really want to talk an English speaker to improve my English ^.^)

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My hometown

I come from Hanoi. It is a big city, and also the capital of Vietnam. Hanoi is famous for its rich history and culture. There are many old pagodas, temples and ancient parts of town which you can easily visit. When you travel to Hanoi, you have to try the Hanoi cuisine. Its traditional dishes are really great, so it would be a shame if you didn't eat food in Hanoi. Beside the old and ancient towns, pagodas and temples, Hanoi has a lot of skyscrapers, cinemas, parks, exciting entertainment services, etc. Hanoi is a wonderful place you should travel to/visit in your holiday.

Lovely piece to read, and totally understandible! Just a few notes on my corrections:

The sentence: "You can see some ancient towns or old pagodas and temples easily." wasn't completely clear. A city and a town are two different places, so a town can't be in a city. So I'm assuming you meant several parts of the city are ancient? This you can call a "part of town".

With "you cannot try" it seems like you mean that you won't be able to try the food there, while what you mean is that you definitely should try the food.

I changed "very awesome" to "really great" because "awesome" is a usually a bit more casual. But it's not wrong, just a suggestion.

"etc." comes from "et cetera", in which the word "et" already means "and", so you don't need to add the word "and".

I hope this is useful. Please feel free to contact me for a lesson to improve your speaking skills!

Nowadays, teenagers like me often admire singers, actors, politicians, etc., and consider them to be their idol. But I am different from them. My idol is very simple; he is my father. He is a wonderful and energetic father, although he is not perfect. After the war between Vietnam and America, Vietnamese people had to endure hardships. Like the others, my family was very poor. My grandparents had to work very hard to earn money to look after/take care of five children. Because my father was the first son, he had to help his father the most. When he was in grade 9, like I am now, he had to plow/he plowed (maybe add what he plowed; a field?) with his mother and he did a lot difficult jobs/chores which I now wouldn’t know how to do, and they might even make me cry if I had to do them. Besides helping his parents very much, my father was a pretty good student. Although he was born into a poor family, he gave him a leg up ( what do you mean by this?) So, now my dad has a master’s degree in economy. To me, he is the greatest father. He always encourages me when I have problems. He makes me smile when I am upset. He cooks delicious dishes for his children. And he buys everything I need. All in all, my father is so wonderful and admirable. I love my father so much. Thanks for you teaching and care.

Well done, I think this notebook was already a lot better than your previous one!

Some corrections were suggestions for a slightly better flow, and some were grammar (verb conjugation). The biggest corrections:

“Like I am now” – otherwise it seems like you had to do the same things as your dad then.

The sentence about the chores wasn’t completely clear, so I changed it to what I think you meant.

I didn’t know what you meant by giving a leg up – maybe it’s an expression I don’t know.

Your father sounds like a very wonderful man!

I come from Hanoi. It is a big city, and it is also the capital of Vietnam. Hanoi is famous for its rich and historic culture. You can see some ancient towns or old pagodas and temples easily. When you travel to Hanoi, you must try the Hanoi cuisine. The traditional dishes are very awesome, so it would be a shame if you don't eat food in Hanoi. Besides the old and ancient towns, pagodas and temples, Hanoi has a lot of skycrapers, cinemas, parks, exciting entertainment services, etc. Hanoi is a wonderful place you should travel to for your holiday. ( Note: The Vietnamese girls are very beautiful and hospitable, especially the girls from Hanoi. If you want to make a friend with a Hanoi girl, you can add me. Thank you so much if you add me as a friend. I really want to talk to an English speaker to improve my English ^.^)

Great! I hope to visit one day!

My hometown

I come from Hanoi. It is a big city, and also the capital of Vietnam. Hanoi is famous for rich and historic culture. You can see some ancient towns or old pagodas and temples easily. When you travel to Hanoi, you cannot try the Hanoi cuisine. The traditional dishes are very awesome, so it is so shame if you don't eat food in Hanoi. Beside the old and ancient towns, pagodas and temples, Hanoi has a lot of skycrapers, cinema, park, exciting entertainment services, and etc. Hanoi is a wonderful place you should travel in your holiday.
( Note: The (no need the) Vietnamese girls are very beautiful and hospitable, especially the girls(the ones) from Hanoi. If you want to make a friend with one of the Hanoi girl( make firend with a girl from hanoi), you can add me. Thank you so much if( for adding me) you add friend with me. I really want to talk (to) an English speaker to improve my English ^.^)

Since the lady corrected most of your mistakes, there are still some mistakes from the note that hasnt been corrected..

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