it's all starts with a like
It all starts when they like you and interested in you so they start getting to know you, more and more they know you better, talking about life, hobbies, dreams, likes, hates,..... etc
then they become a part of your life you share with them their happiness and sadness ,you really become connected to them and your day is very bad without them, they stopp caring and you became non mystery for them this when they get bored and you will became nothing to them but an old news, I wish the best of luck who weren't lucky to find friends "like me" and those who have that God bless them to you they are a treasure in life..:)
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It all starts with a like
It all starts when they like you and are interested in you. They start to know you more and more. They know you better and talk about life, hobbies, dreams, likes, dislikes ("dislikes" is a better word to use in this context), etc.Then, they become a part of your life. You share with them their happiness and sadness , you become really connected with them, and your day becomes worse without them. They stop caring and you become non mystery boring (not sure what you mean by "non-mystery" - I'm guessing you're saying something similar to "boring") to them. this When they get bored and you become nothing but an old news to them, I wish the best of luck to those who weren't lucky to find friends like me (not sure why there are quotation marks in this case - typically they wouldn't be needed here). To those who have, that God bless them. to you They are a treasure in life..:)
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Comments:
I notice that you're using "them" a lot in your sentences. Some sentences can be simplified or reworded; there were times where I got a bit confused by some of your sentences. I've provided some sentences below that I would have changed to make their meaning much more clearer. That being said, keep up the good work! :)
Examples
(Referring to both of you) You share happiness and sadness, share a connection, and brighten each other's days.
Some people have friends that get bored of them and consider them nothing but old news. I wish the best of luck to those who weren't lucky to find friends like me.
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it's all starts with a like (Suggestion: It All Starts When They Like You. The phrase ¨a like¨ makes me think of giving someone a thumbs up on Facebook, YouTube, etc. So I think changing the title a little helps clarify your meaning.)
It all starts when they like you. They are interested in you so they start getting to know you more and more. As they know you better, you spend time talking about life, hobbies, dreams, likes, hates dislikes..... etc.Then they become a part of your life. You share with them their your happiness and sadness. You really become connected to them, and your day is very bad without them. Then, they stop caring, and you became become a non mystery for to them. They get bored with you and you will became become nothing to them but an old news. I wish the best of luck to those who weren't lucky to find friends "like me" and those who have that God bless them . to you that God blesses those who have. They are a treasure in life..:)
I think using short sentences and the same (present) tense helps articulate your ideas in this journal entry. Good effort!
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