A Cute Girl

We worked overtime until last weekend. My colleague had to take her five years old daughter to my company. The girl was smart and active. Her mother was very busy as a cashier and she looked bored of sitting around a noisy crowd. I said to her "Let me take you out to play". She nodded.

I took her to the storage room, there were less people in there. I asked her to help me distribute water bottles and present boxes to customers. She immediately started working seriously. The boxes were rather heavy for her but she insisted on carrying two boxes at a time and refused to take my help. After a while, I needed to move a big empty outer packing box to another room. She volunteered to do me this favor.

At first we lifted the box together. I managed to make it feel lighter to her. She was unhappy when she noticed that and asked me to loosen my hands. I did, and saw how she could move the box which was almost as tall as her. To my surprise she converted the box upside down and lifted it from the inside using her head and hands. Then she began to run towards the destination. Everyone around bursted into laughter.

What a cute and bright girl she was!

* I hope this helps. =)

A Cute Girl

We worked overtime before last weekend. （？before）

We have been worked overtime for weeks？

My colleague had to take her five years old daughter to my company.

My coworker had to take her five year old to the company.

(1. colleague和coworker是不一样的，好像colleague指同样的工作，而coworker是同事。

2. year 没有s的。）

The girl was smart and activity.

The girl was smart and active.

 Her mother was very busy as a casher and she looked boring of sitting among noisy crowd.

Since her mother was very busy being as a casher，she looked bored of sitting among the noisy crowd.

 I said to her "Let me take you to play". She nodded.

 I said to her, "Let me take you to play". She nodded.

I took her to the storage room where there were less people.

I took her to the storage room where there were few people.

I asked her to help distributing water bottles and present-boxes to customers.

I asked her to help distributing bottles of water and gift boxes to the customers.

 She worked seriously immediately.

She immediately worked seriously.

The boxes were rather heavy to her but she insisted on carrying on two one time and refused my help.

The gift boxed were rather heavy for her，but she insisted on carrying two boxes each time and declined my help.

(哦，不要用refuse，用decline，这个我确认哈）

After a while, I need to move an empty big outer packing box to another room.

After a while，I need to move the empty big carton to another room.

 She volunteered to do me a favor.

At first we lifted the carton together.

I managed to make her feel lighter. She was unhappy when she noticed that and asked me to loosen my hands.

She was unhappy when she noticed that most of the weight was on my side and asked me to release my hands.

 I did and saw how she could move the box which was almost as tall as her.

I did so and saw how she would move the carton which was almost as tall as her.

To my surprise she conversed the box upside down and lifted it inside using her head and hands.

Then she began to run to the destination. Everyone surrounding bursted into laugh.

How the girl cute and bright was!

How cute and bright the girl was!

Interesting essay. Waiting to say native spearker's correction,:D

A Cute Girl

We had to worked overtime before last weekend. My colleague had to take took her five years old daughter towork my company. The girl was is1 smart and bubbly activity. Her mother was very busy working as a cashier.   and she The little girl looked boring bored of sitting among amid the noisy crowd. I said to her "Let's go and play! me take you to play". She nodded happily.

I took her to the storage room where there were less people. I asked her to help me to distributing distribute some water bottles and present- gift boxes to customers. All at once, she worked began in earnesty with her task seriously immediately. The boxes were rather heavy to for her but she insisted on carrying on two at a one time and refused my help. After a while, I needed to move an empty big a big but empty outer packing box to another room. She volunteered to move it for me as a sort of favour. to do me a favor.

At first we lifted the box together. I managed to make her feel lighter. When we were moving the box, I bore the brunt of its weight.  She was unhappy when she noticed my ruse and asked me to let the box go.  that and asked me to loosen my hands. I did and saw how I was curious to see how she could move the box something that is as which was almost as tall as her. To my surprise she conversed had the box turned upside down and lifted it from the inside by using her head and hands. Then Thus she began was able to run to run with it to the intended spot.  destination. Everyone  All those witnessing her intelligence burst into laughter.  surrounding bursted into laugh.

How the girl Such a cute and bright girl was!

1.  I did not use the past tense.  This is because it implies that the girl is not smart anymore!