JUST A DIARY ENTRY ON Jun 14th
I would like someone to correct my diary entry( or to tell me the natural way of saying some things below. But I would be glad even if you JUST CORRECT my entry) I was wondering if you could do that for me, please?
JUST A DIARY ENTRY ON Jun 14th
I am writing this at 1:30 AM in Japanese time. I don't come an idea to tell you guys here up with my mind, as I am felling so sleepy right now, so I am just thinking about something. Speaking of writing something in midnight, it seems you might write something like poems when you write some sentences in midnight. I don't know well why people do like this, but I feel we want to write something like poems. I guess one of reason is that the time, in midnight, is so quiet comparing with in morning or afternoon. We come lots of ideas with my mind at midnight, right? Say, when you want to communicate the massage which express your thankful with your friends, you generally write this in midnight, not in afternoon or morning, right? So, What I just want say now is midnight has something like magic powers to come up some ideas with our mind. Possibly, also this italki, it might bette way to write it in the midnight rather than in the afternoon. Yes, I'll do this.
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JUST A DIARY ENTRY ON Jun 14th
I would like someone to correct my diary entry( or to tell me the natural way of saying some things below. But I would be glad even if you JUST CORRECT my entry) I was wondering if you could do that for me, please?JUST A DIARY ENTRY ON Jun 14th
I am writing this at 1:30 AM in Japanese time. I don't come an idea to tell you guys here up with my mind, as I am felling so sleepy right now, so I am just thinking about something. I can't really tell you what I am thinking right now, because I am too sleepy. Speaking of writing something in midnight, it seems you might write something like poems when you write some sentences in midnight. At this hour, poetry seems like the best thing to write, because it is so quiet.I don't know well why people do like this, but I feel we want to write something like poems. I guess one of reason is that the time, in midnight, is so quiet comparing with in morning or afternoon. We come lots of ideas with my mind at midnight, right? Say, when you want to communicate the massage which express your thankful with your friends, you generally write this in midnight, not in afternoon or morning, right? So, What I just want say now is midnight has something like magic powers to come up some ideas with our mind. Possibly, also this italki, it might bette way to write it in the midnight rather than in the afternoon. Yes, I'll do this.I also have more time to think about my friends and write messages to them thanking them for being in my life.
Hi Taichi! Sarah gave you some great ideas at the sentence level, and I added "my two cents worth" in which I tried to restate your ideas in simpler terms. Overall, I would suggest that you try to use shorter sentences, and be willing to delete sentences that aren't really adding to what you want to say. Let me know if you want any more help!
Thomas Gault, PhD
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JUST A DIARY ENTRY ON Jun 14th
I would like someone to correct my diary entry( or to tell me the natural way of saying some things below. But I would be glad even if you JUST CORRECT my entry) I was wondering if you could do that for me, please?JUST A DIARY ENTRY ON Jun 14th
I am writing this at 1:30 AM in Japanese time. I didn't come up with an idea to tell you guys here that's on my mind, as I am feeling so sleepy right now, so I am just thinking about something. Speaking of writing something at midnight, it seems you might write something like poems when you write some sentences at midnight. I don't know well why people do like this, but I feel we want to write something like poems. I guess one of the reason is that the time, at midnight, is so quiet compared with in morning or afternoon. We come up with lots of ideas with my mind at midnight, right? Say, when you want to communicate the message which expresses that you're thankful for your friends, you generally write this at midnight, not in the afternoon or morning, right? So, what I just want say now is midnight has something like magic powers for coming up with ideas. Possibly, also on italki, it might be a better way to write it in the midnight rather than in the afternoon. Yes, I'll do this.
Thanks for sharing, Taichi! Keep writing!
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JUST A DIARY ENTRY ON Jun 14th (writing about write something at midnight)
I'm writing this at 1:30 AM in Japanese time. I can't really tell you what I am thinking right now, because I am too sleepy. Speaking of writing, something at midnight, it seems you might write something like poems when you write some sentences at midnight. I don't know well why people do like this, but I feel we want to write something like poems. I guess one of the reason is that the time, at midnight, is so quiet compared with in morning or afternoon. That's why, at this hour, poetry seems like the best thing to write. We come up with lots of ideas with my mind at midnight, right? Say, when you want to communicate the message which expresses the you're thankful for friends, you generally write this at midnight, not in the afternoon or morning, right? So, what I just want say now is midnight has something like magic powers for coming up with ideas. Possibly, also on italki, it might be a better way to write it in the midnight rather than in the afternoon. Yes, I'll do this.
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