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CAE Proposal - feedback please Hi, I am taking soon CAE exam, so I would very much appreciate if somebody gave me a feedback of proposal below (the best would be with CAE criteria).Thank you in advance! Task:You are a member of club that now needs to raise an amount of money. In preparation for a club meeting you have been asked to write a proposal to the other members. Your proposal should explain what the money is needed for and suggest ways in which the money could be raised. Introduction Our sport club has been running already for 30 years and it has been always very successful, but recently we are struggling with our expenses and we desperately need some financial support. The principal aims of this proposal are to identify our needs which require the financial support and to provide suggestions how the money for sport club could be raised. Current situation Since our club has been established, our gym has not been reconstructed nor renewed. The ceiling of thy gym is ancient and I am afraid it is in danger of falling down soon. Moreover, our equipment is so weary that is not safe for our athletes anymore and it is rather to put their health in the risk. Therefore, we are in an urgent need of money which would enable us to fix that. Recommendations I would strongly suggest asking for subsidies from our government, which provides many grant programs for health and sport and without doubt we would fit in the requirements of some of those. Other option would be a higher member fee, which is paid by members every month, so it would cover at least the expenses for equipment and ensure athlete´s safety. Additionally, some money could be earned by organisation of run marathons for public, which is highly popular now. Conclusion I am convinced that if above mentioned suggestions are implemented, the situation is bound to improve in very near future. Not only that after this implementation we will have money for high-tech equipment but also we will be sure of safety of our members.

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CAE Proposal - feedback please

Hi, I am taking soon CAE exam, so I would very much appreciate if somebody gave me a feedback of proposal below (the best would be with CAE criteria).Thank you in advance!

Task:You are a member of club that now needs to raise an amount of money. In preparation for a club meeting you have been asked to write a proposal to the other members. Your proposal should explain what the money is needed for and suggest ways in which the money could be raised.

Introduction
Our sports club has been running already for already 30 years and it has always been always very successful, but recently lately we are struggling with our expenses and we desperately need some financial support. The principal aims of this proposal are to identify our needs which require the financial support and to provide suggestions how the money for the sports club could be raised.

Current situation
Since the moment our club has been established, our gym has not been reconstructed nor renewed. The ceiling of thy gym is ancient (you can't use "ancient" regarding the ceiling. A temple or a palace can be ancient, not a ceiling) and I am afraid it might fall is in danger of falling down soon. Moreover, our equipment is so weary wornt out that is not safe for our athletes anymore and it is can rather to put their health in the at risk. Therefore, we are in an urgent need of money which would enable us to fix that.

Recommendations
I would strongly suggest asking for subsidies from our government, which provides many grant programs for health and sport and, without doubt, we would fit in the requirements of some of those. Other option would be a higher membership fee, which is paid by members every month, so it would cover at least the expenses for equipment and ensure athlete´s athlets' safety. Additionally, some money could be earned by organisation of organising run marathons for public, which is highly popular now.

Conclusion
I am convinced that if the above mentioned suggestions are implemented, the situation is bound to improve in very near the nearest future. Not only (be careful with this constructions, it presupposes usinf inversion) that after this implementation we will have money will we have money for high-tech equipment after the implementation, but also we will be sure of safety of our members' safety.

I have taken CPE not so long ago and we didn't have proposal there, but I have checked the criteria and yours seems quite well-written. Just mind the small mistales and I'm sure you'll get a good grade :)

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