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IELTS Essay Part 2 (Houses Style) Some people think the newly built houses should be as same as the old houses style in local areas. Others argue that local authorities should allow people to build houses in their own styles. Discuss both views and give your opinion. With the emphasis on the style of houses has increased in recent years, people insist that they should be allow to build houses with their own styles, while others would like to abide by the old house style in local areas. I believe that the local people have a right to decide their own styles of building. In this age of globalization, the newly built houses has a special feature that it commonly be notice around the world. People more likely to create a unique appearance of local building that attract people’s attention and that reflect distinctive features of local area. For example, the urban renewal is development with soaring pace in many developing countries, especially in China, many cities have changed the style of old houses building since the modern style of buildings meet the demand of urban evolution. Also, with advancement of technology, people prefer to enjoy the smart home and they need their own styles of newly built houses for a better standard of living. Therefore, the old house style is not satisfied people’s need any more. It is true that the old houses style remain the historical value for local areas, but the obvious merits brought by newly built style clearly outweigh its disadvantage, and people and local authorities should memories the old built style, such as reserve its photos, build a museum, and write a book. Overall, I believe that people have a freedom to express their own style of new house and have a right to decide which style should be build, but the local historical value should not be neglected.

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IELTS Essay Part 2 (House Styles)

Some people think the newly built houses should be the same as the old house style[1] in local areas. Others argue that local authorities should allow people to build houses in their own styles. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

With the emphasis on the style of houses increasing[2] in recent years, people insist that they should be allowed to build houses with their own styles, while others would like to abide by the old house style[1] in local areas. I believe that the local people have a right to decide their own styles of building.

In this age of globalization, the newly built houses have a special feature that can commonly be notice around the world. People are more likely to create a unique appearance of a local building[3] that attracts people’s attention and that reflects distinctive features of the local area. For example, urban renewal is developing with a soaring pace in many developing countries, especially in China, and many cities have changed the style of the old houses being built since the modern style of buildings meets the demand of urban evolution. Also, with advancement of technology, people prefer to enjoy the smart home and they need their own styles of newly built houses for a better standard of living. Therefore, the old house style is not satisfying people’s needs any more.

It is true that the old house style retains[4] the historical value for local areas, but the obvious merits brought by newly built styles clearly outweigh their disadvantage, and people and local authorities should keep memories of the old built style[1], such as preserving their photos, building museums, and writing books.

Overall, I believe that people have a freedom to express their own style of a new house and have a right to decide which style should be built,[5] but the local historical value should not be neglected.

[1. If there is a single old house style then this should be singular. But if there is more than one old style of house then this should be plural (styles).

2. The word "With" requires a present participle. If you started your sentence with "Since" then your original words following it would be correct.

3. or: "appearance of local buildings".

4. If more than one old house style then: "the old house styles retain the ...".

5. Or: "a right to decide which style to build, ..."]

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