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A picture of Arnold Schwarzenegger A celebrated actor Arnold Schwarzenegger recently posted a picture of himself while he was sleeping under his statue, and he wrote: How times have changed…. It is not because he was old that he wrote this, it is because when he was the governor of California, he was invited to join this hotel’s opening ceremony. And he was told by the staff in the hotel whenever he comes, there will be always a reserved room for him. A few years later, when stepped down and went to the hotel for looking for a room, the staff in the hotel told him that there was no room for him, because the room was very demanding, if he wanted a room, he had to pay for it. Then he took out his sleep bag and slept down on his statue, he wanted to deliver the message: When I was on an important position, they always prized me; but when I lost the position, people would forget me, and they wouldn’t keep their promise. Never believe the status and money you have, even you couldn’t believe your power, and nothing would last forever. You are not always who think you think you will always be, nothing lasts forever.

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A picture of Arnold Schwarzenegger

A The celebrated actor Arnold Schwarzenegger recently posted a picture of himself while he was sleeping under his statue, .  And he wrote: "How times have changed…." 

It is not because he was old that he wrote this,.   iIt is because when he was the gGovernor of California, he was invited (BETTER:  had been invited) to join this hotel’s opening ceremony. And he was told by the staff in of the hotel that whenever he comesame, there will be always would be a reserved room for him. A few years later, when after he had stepped down as Governor, he and went to the hotel for looking for a room, .  tThe staff in of the hotel told him that there was no room for him at the hotel, because the rooms was very demanding, were very in demand.  iIf he wanted a room, he had would have to pay for it.

Then he took out his sleeping bag and slept down on under his statue, he wanted to deliver the a message: When I was oin an important position, they always prized valued me; but when I lost the position, people would forget forgot me, and they wouldn’t keep their promise. Never believe in the status and money you have, even you couldn’t believe your power, and.   nNothing would will last forever.

You are not always who think you think you will always be, .  nNothing lasts forever.

This is pretty good, and you tried some difficult verb tenses.  The easiest thing you can do to improve your English writing is to avoid run-on sentences.  Remember:  a sentence only needs a subject and a predicate (what the subject is acting on).


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Hi Gaia Massara, thank you for your help. I will recheck your corrections, it is realy useful. Shannon
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Hi Peter, how about this one? You are not always be the one that you think who you are, nothing lasts forever.
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"You are not always who you think you will always be, nothing lasts forever." This sentence is a bit awkward though even so.
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Hey Shannon, great work! i made some corrections for you. if you have any questions let me know

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