Ielts essay part 2 1.刚刚写的，想请教有没有语法错误（grammar mistake)； 2.有没有跑题(relevant)； 3.有没有更好或者更贴切的表达方式需要修改？ Traffic and housing problems in major cities could be solved by moving large companies and factories and their employees to the countryside. To what extend do you agree with this opinion? To address the problems of traffic congestion and the shortage of housing. It’s suggested that the large companies and factories and their employees move to the countryside. It has potential negative outcomes should not be neglect. It’s true that the large companies and factories have disadvantage effect on traffic and housing matters in major cities, especially during the commuter time. The large companies and factories creates huge employment and attractive increasing number of people moving in the major cities. The major city will be reduce the population burden on its shoulders if the large companies and factories relocated in rural areas. However, this solution could not practice on a materialistic level. Firstly, people prefer to enjoy the living standard with high quality, such as education and medical systems, they wouldn’t follow up the footprint of the companies and factories. Even if those people who willing to move there, they need to travel between the countryside and the city frequently for medical service or entertainment facility, leading to new traffic problems. Secondly, the product’ cost of transportation will be increase, the consumer will bear the cost in the end. Finally, the large companies and factories and their employees play an indispensable role in city’s revenue, the loss of these will lead to a reduction in government revenue, the economic of city will be shrink. It is worse part for a major city. To sum up, the large companies and factories and their employees move to the countryside could be resolve the problems of traffic and housing. But the authorities still consider new problems after take this option.