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Cut my hair bang! I cut my hair bang. It's been a long time that I didn't have a hair bang.

I've wanted to make a new hair bang. I've thought many times and finally I got the bang. I cut on my own. I don't have any hair cut scissor so I just cut the bang by using normal scissor. The bang doesn't look like what I expected but I like it. I didn't bring hair iron from my mom's house so it's not easy to make look good. So I had to buy one. I bought a hair roller instead. Because it's cheap. But I bought bigger one than I thought, so I need to change the size.

Q: I use 'so'alot. But using 'so' makes my note a bit tired. What else I can use?

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Thank you all advice!:))
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I cut my hair bang. It's been a long time that I didn't have a hair bang.

I've wanted to make a new hair bang. I've thought many times and finally I got the bang. I cut on my own. I don't have any hair cut scissor so I just cut the bang by using normal scissor. The bang doesn't look like what I expected but I like it. I didn't bring hair iron from my mom's house so it's not easy to make look good. So I had to buy one. I bought a hair roller instead. Because it's cheap. But I bought bigger one than I thought, so I need to change the size.

Q: I use 'so'alot. But using 'so' makes my note a bit tired. What else I can use?

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US English = bangs. UK English = A fringe.
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This feeling is a tough obstacle in any language and I think the only way to grow past it is to practice new vocabulary and creativity in your writing/speech. For example, you could word your story as:


Cut my bangs! (always spelled as bangs, and you can drop the "hair" because it is a hairstyle. Similar to how a "ponytail" wouldn't be a "hair ponytail")

1. I cut my bangs. It's been a long time since I haven't had bangs.

2. I've wanted to try new bangs and I've thought about it many times before I finally decided to cut it by myself.

3. I don't have any hair-cutting scissors* so I just cut my hair using normal scissors.

*scissors are always plural, you can think of it as two blades (each a scissor) joined together to create a pair of scissors. "Scissor" as a singular form is basically never used except for terms such as a "scissor kick". 

4. My bangs don't look like what I expected, but I like how they came out.

5. I forgot to bring the hair iron from my mom's house so it's hard to make them look good. Instead of buying a new iron, I ended up buying a hair roller because it was cheap.

6. However, the hair roller I bought was bigger than I expected which means I'll need to get one in a different size.


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I split up the story into independent ideas to loosely visualize how my take on it went. I think the difficult part in the story is number five and I actually have the same issue with Korean and I think it would help if I showed you how I would write it.

나는 머리 아이언이 엄마집에 잃어벌려서요. 그래서 잘 보기 좋게 만들지가 어려워요. 그래서 머리 아이언을 사야 되는 생각있었어요. 그런데 머리 아이언보다 머리 롤어가 더 싸니까 머리 롤어 샀다.

LOL I haven't practiced Korean in so long so I apologize if it is ugly to look at. I repeat a lot of stuff because it is what I am comfortable with (그래서 and 그런데 are very easy to use :P ). As I practice my Korean, I will start to have a better understanding with how/when to use words and the common ways to structure sentences. I feel like the solution to avoiding repeating the same words and sounding robotic/unnatural is to practice using the words/sentences that we are uncomfortable with and to receive the criticism that will guide us in the right direction.

I am positive that you are able to reword my Korean to sound a lot more natural and also in 5% of the time it took me to write it up. In the same way you can use your knowledge/experience with the Korean language to reword my sentence, you will be able to reword your same sentence in English to sound a lot smoother without repeating the same words. All it takes is a little practice!

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You are correct. Over-using the same words can be a little jarring for the listener. Replace so with ... therefore, thus, ergo, hence, because, but (but works in cases where the ideas are opposing), usually, and, or however. I'm sure there are more :)

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