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Essay #81 "IT Technology" 08.04.18 The Development of internet technology is one of the most prominent features recent decades. However, some people think that despite its positive initial effect in future it will affect our society only in a bad way. But in my opinion this is not true and IT will only increase its positive influence and change everyday life for the better. Everyone has noticed the changes in the communication between people that were made by the development of this technology. But there was a considerable change in the interaction between people and governmental institutions as well; now we all have access to direct dialog via the internet. So it gave rise to a social-oriented feature phenomenon and made it easier to express thoughts and concerns and it will develop even more in future. Another effect can be seen in how business works and expands. The main place where all it happens has moved from a real physical location like an office or a shop to the internet. And a properly constructed site can drastically change the profit of a company and give it enough momentum for further development. Moreover, in the next several decades absolutely all businesses might move from real-life locations to the internet. Also, it has a huge effect on people’s approach to education. Nowadays you can get all sorts of classes or courses at home sitting in front of a computer screen. It has become a standard practice and is not considered as some alien technology, but as a reasonable evolution of education. Thus it can be a substitute for classical education and create an absolutely new educational system that could enhance and even supercede the current one. To conclude, the development of the IT sphere has already given rise to many useful features and had a very positive effect on the world. And in future it will continue in the same direction with a constantly increasing level of influence on our society. Thus suspicions to this technology are based on prejudices and backward thinking and not on reasonable statements. So IT development has already affected our society in a positive way and will continue to do so in future.

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Also, it has had a huge effect on the people’s approach to education, (full stop) Nowadays, (no comma) you can get all sorts of classes or courses from at home sitting in front of a computer screen. It has become a standard practice and is not considered as some alien technology, but as a reasonable evolution of education. Thus, (no comma) it can be a substitute for classical education and create an absolutely new educational system that could enhance and even excel supercede the current one.

To conclude, the development in of the IT sphere has already brought given rise to many useful features and created had a very positive effect on the world. And in future it will maintain the same route continue in the same direction and with the a constantly increasing level of influence on our society. Thus, (no comma) suspicions to that of this technology are based on prejudices and backward thinking and not on some reasonable statements, (full stop) So IT development has already affected our society in a positive way and will proceed continue to do so in future.

Yet another good essay! You use punctuation like a Russian! English has slightly different rules. I can tell that you think hard about articles, but some mistakes slip through. 

But the most important thing is that your arguments are consistent and clearly set out.

Just keep going and you will continue to improve.

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Essay #81 "IT Technology" 08.04.18

The Development of the internet technology is one of the most prominent features of last recent decades. However, some people think that despite its positive initial effect in future it will affect our society only in a bad way. But, (no comma) in my opinion, (no comma) it this is not true and IT will only increase its positive influence and change an everyday life to for the better.

Everyone has noticed (seen) the changes in the communication between people that were made by the development of this technology. But there was quite a considerable change in the interaction between people and governmental institutions as well, (semi-colon) now we all have an access to a direct dialog with them via the internet. So it brought gave rise to a social-oriented feature phenomenon and made it easier to express your thoughts or and concerns and it will develop even more in future.

Another thing effect can be seen is changes in how business works and expands, (full stop) now The main place where all it happens has moved from a real physical spot place/location like an office or a shop to the internet. And a properly constructed site can drastically change the profit of a company and give it enough momentum for a further development. Moreover, in the next several decades absolutely all businesses might move from real-life locations to the internet.


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