First notebook entry: Introducing myself

Hello, my dear friends! I am Soann, this is a special Englishi name that I gave to myself. It's a combination with my Chinese name and a previous English name that I had given to myself. The "s" stands for sulfur in chemistry ,1 which has the same pronounciation with as my Chinese family name, "Liu" in Chinese. The "o" means a circle which has the same pronounciation with my first name "Yuan"!  Well,  isn't that funny it interesting to do have such a combination?

I am a typical Gemini.   Sometimes I can be very generous and outgoing, as my friend has put iy to me that I am a sunshine girl a girl of sunshine personality as told by my friend.  But However the inner me is quite the opposite, I am very shy in front of the unfamiliar situations. And I am really a sensitve girl. 2 I am really quite impressable.

English has always been my favorite language. I had this passion since I was still a little girl. And English It 3has always been one of my favorite subjects.  I love English. it.  However, I found myself stay at the same my level of English remain the same since I entered college.   and I couldn't find a very good way to improve.  of English study, this is why Hence4 I entered this magic world! Hope we can have good time together~

1.  This is redundant.  An educated English reader knows what sulfur (also spelt as sulphur) is.

2.  When you say someone is sensitive, it ha a bad connotation, not exactly what you mean in this essay.  Here's a better word to use. 

3.  Unless you are writing for rhetoric emphasis, do not use too much of the same word.  It makes your writing boring. 

4.  This is not incorrect.  Just showing you new words to learn and improve your level of English.

See http://www.italki.com/notebook/entry/88735.htm for your punctuation mistakes.

First notebook entry: Introducing myself

Hello, my dear friends! I am Soann, this is a special English name I gave myself. It's a combination of my Chinese name and previous English name. "s" stands for sulfur in chemistry, which has the same pronunciation as my family name "liu" in Chinese. "o" means a circle, which has the same pronunciation as my first name "yuan"! Well, isn't it funny to make such a combination?
I am a typical Gemini: sometimes I can be very generous and outgoing, as my friend has put it to me, "I am a sunshine girl". But the inner me is the opposite, I am very shy when faced with unfamiliar situations. And I am really a sensitve girl.
English has always been my favourite language. I have had this passion since I was a little girl. And English has always been one of my favourite subjects. I love English. However, I have found myself staying at the same level since I started college , and I couldn't find a very good way to study English.  This is why I entered this magic world! Hope we can have good time together~

Fantastic first entry!  Well done!!  It is only the joining words and some word-orders that I have corrected in order to make the text flow more fluently and sound more "English".  I have corrected spellings to the true English format (as opposed to American English) but these can be ignored if you wish.  In order to improve your level, I would advise browsing to www.audible.com and downloading some audio books so that you can listen to the language whilst possibly reading along in a book.  Very best of luck to you, Josephine.