Grandfather
My grandfather died in 2005 at the age of 91. He was a veteran of the WWII. He was recruited in 1941 and served as a private in the NKVD. He had awards. During the war he was wounded and later released from the army. I don’t know what he did but I know exactly that he didn’t want to die. He was afraid of the death until his last exhale.
He almost never told us about the war. He didn’t like to recall it. Only once I heard a story from him. Here is it.
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Grandfather
My grandfather died in 2005 at the age of 91. He was a veteran of the WWII. He was recruited in 1941 and served as a private in the NKVD. He had awards(medals). During the war he was wounded and later released from the army. I don’t know what he did but I know that he didn’t want to die. He was afraid of the death until his last exhale.He almost never told us about the war. He didn’t like to recall it. Only once I heard a story from him. Here is it.
to be continued
I look forward to the continuation of your story. Many of us do not want to die but your grandfather lasted longer than many people do. The fact that he inspired you to write about him means he obviously made an impression on you. Good writing, clear and easy to follow.
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My Grandfather
My grandfather died in 2005 at the age of 91. He was a veteran of WWII. He was recruited in 1941 and served as a private in the NKVD. He was given many awards.* During the war, he was seriously wounded and later released from the Soviet army. I don’t know exactly what he did, but I do know for certain that he didn’t ever want to die. He was afraid of death until his last breath. He very rarely ever talked to us about the war. He didn’t like to recall it. Only once I heard a story from him. Here is it…
To be continued.
Hi Oleg. Good job! Whatever changes that I’ve made were merely done to allow your sentences to sound more natural to my native ears. I hope that his helps you. J.
P.S. And, I look forward to reading your grandfather’s war story!
*As an aside, I agree with your usage of the word award as it implies giving what is deserved or merited usually after a careful weighing of pertinent factors. Thus, your grandfather was given his awards, by his superiors, for his bravery and outstanding service during the war. While it would not be incorrect to say that he “won” such awards, I feel that it would be imprecise, and in doing so, it lessens the accomplishments. Others are free to disagree, but IMHO, contestants can win prizes and teams can win championships, and that’s the intent behind their efforts, but a soldier is awarded his or her medals without any intent on receiving them.
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Grandfather
My grandfather died in 2005 at the age of 91. He was a veteran of WWII. He was recruited in 1941 and served as a private in the NKVD. He won many awards. During the war he was wounded and later released from the army. I don’t know what happened but I know that he didn’t want to die. He was afraid of death until his last breath.He almost never spoke about the war. He didn’t like to recall it. Only once I heard a story from him. Here it is.
to be continued
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