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The First Short Essay in Italki Hello, my name is Stephanie. I come from Taiwan. I want to improve English ability, but I have few opportunities to write English in university and in work. Therefore, maybe I will write some short essays, and try to make some friends here. Besides my mother tongue is Chinese, and I am glad to help others learn Chinese. Nice to meet you~

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The  My first short essay on italki

Hello, my name is Stephanie. I come from Taiwan. I want to improve English ability, but I have few opportunities to write English at in university and at in work. Therefore, maybe I will write some short essays, and try to make some friends here.
Besides My mother tongue is Chinese, and I would am glad to help others learn Chinese.
Nice to meet you~
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The First Short Essay in Italki

Hello, my name is Stephanie. I come from Taiwan. I want to improve English ability, but I have few opportunities to write English in at university or at  work. Therefore, maybe Perhaps I will write some short essays and try to make some friends here.


Besides my mother tongue is Chinese, and I am glad to help others learn Chinese.
Nice to meet you~


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1) 'at college or at work' -- "at" is idiomatic (in)

2) Therefore....  This is too strong a word for such a short piece of writing. Generally "therefore" is used after making a larger  argument or for showing your logic.

3) " I will try to....and make....."  Both "try" and "make" share a single subject, so you don't need a comma - they are not separate clauses.


Nice work!  Very nice to meet you.


我在台灣開始學習中文。我學中文三個年學習了。我很高興認識你。


 James




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My First Short Essay in Italki

Hello, my name is Stephanie. I come from Taiwan. I want to improve my English. I have few opportunities to write English in university and at work, so maybe I will write some short essays, and try to make some friends here.
My mother tongue is Chinese, and I am glad to help others learn Chinese.
Nice to meet you~
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Hi Stephanie, Nice to meet you:) Great to that you are thinking about writing short stories, in English. I´m happy to help you with the English but I´m not going to correct your entry in public here as I feel that is just being rude and unfeeling towards you. Remember to practice and improve your English you need to listen to a lot of English, read a lot of English, speak as much as you can in English, including speaking to yourself and write in English. Have a great day, Sharon

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