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He looks like Uncle but in fact， he is a college student. Although he is not handsome, he is very popular with girls. He is a very considerate and good tempered person,never angry with me even when I was joking with him.What'more,he always buys my favorite food for me and helps me when I'm in need.He is also very patient with my willfulness.When I'm bored, I like to keep calling his name because he will respond me everytime with no impatient.Sometimes when I quarrel with my older sister, he will come out to discourage. He did many things for me and our sisters but never complained. Despite that he is always bullied by us,we still love him . He is my brother.
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He looks like an Uncle but in fact， he is a college student. Although he is not handsome, he is very popular with girls. He is a very considerate and good tempered person, never angry with me even when I was joking with him. What's more, he always buys my favorite food for me and helps me when I'm in need. He is also very patient with my willfulness. When I'm bored, I like to keep calling his name because he will respond to me everytime with no impatience. Sometimes when I quarrel with my older sister, he will come out to discourage us. He did many things for me and our sisters and never complained. Despite that he is always bullied by us, we still love him . He is my brother.
Really good writing, descriptive and humourous, though I doubt the bullied remark, I imagine you mean tease or annoy but bullied is destructive to a person's ego or self-esteem.
Really good writing, descriptive and humourous, though I doubt the bullied remark, I imagine you mean tease or annoy but bullied is destructive to a person's ego or self-esteem.
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she or he
He looks like Uncle but in fact, he is a college student. Although he is not handsome, he is very popular with girls. He is a very considerate and good tempered person, never angry with me even when I was joking with him. What's more, he always buys my favorite food for me and helps me when I'm in need. He is also very patient with my willfulness. When I'm bored, I like to keep calling his name because he will respond to me every time with no impatient impatience. Sometimes when I quarrel with my older sister, he will come out to discourage (it). He did He's done many things for me and our my sisters but never complained. Despite that, he is always being bullied by us, we still love him . He is my brother.The sentence "Despite that he is always bullied by us, we still love him" would probably sound more natural if you said something like "Even though we are always bullying him, we still love him."
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The other corrections are very good, so I won't add a correction.
Just one comment though. We don't use 'uncle' as much in English as it is used in Chinese. This is not really a big problem though, just something that is useful for you to know. In Singaporean English they use it to mean an older man like in Chinese. In most forms of English the word is just used for a family member.
It is a good piece of writing :)
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