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The tiny house - Thank you for your correction! I remember when we decided to get out of Paris for a couple of days! I was tired of this citizen stressing life! I needed to take a break and restore myself, my thougts, all my being was asking me for this. We finally rent a beautiful tiny house in the village of Rânes, in the department of "l'Orne" in Normandy. The landscape where the tiny house was situated was so beautiful. Could you imagine a place without a noise, surrounded by trees, plants, and so many kinds of flowers…? In the middle of all this, a tiny cat! I remember the birds singing in the morning, the perfume of the roses in the garden, the cute little lake quiet and peaceful, and the pontoon at the edge of the water where the small boat I used every day to relax myself remained! If the sun was shining every day its sunset was amazing too. The colors remembered me some romantic movies. Yes the colors were wonderful. Contemplating the light of the sun through the trees, I felt like I was dreaming. Everything was so quiet! The clouds in the sky were quiet as well as the fishes in the little lake, the wind was blowing in the trees branches so tenderly. This beautiful tiny house is called in French: «La Cabane de Jeanne.» When we arrived I felt so much stress. I was everything but in peace! When I looked all around me I told myself: "Christophe, you have become a citizen! That’s why you’re struggling with stress. I had forgotten my childhood in the midst of the nature! Four days after our arrival an amount of peace came into my entire being! I never forgot these days and the tiny house « La Cabane de Jeanne.» Now, each time I remember "La Cabane de Jeanne.", I can feel a well-being invaded me!

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I remember when we decided to get out of Paris for a couple of days! I was tired of this city stressing life! I needed to take a break and restore myself, my thoughts, all my being was asking me for this. We finally rent a beautiful tiny house in the village of Rânes, in the department of "l'Orne" in Normandy. The landscape where the tiny house was situated was so beautiful. Could you imagine a place without a noise, surrounded by trees, plants, and so many kinds of flowers…? In the middle of all this, a tiny cat! I remember the birds singing in the morning, the perfume of the roses in the garden, the cute little lake quiet and peaceful, and the pontoon at the edge of the water where the small boat I used every day to relax myself remained! If the sun was shining every day it`s sunset was amazing too. The colors remembered me some romantic movies. Yes the colors were wonderful. Contemplating the light of the sun through the trees, I felt like I was dreaming. 

Everything was so quiet! The clouds in the sky were quiet as well as the fishes in the little lake, the wind was blowing in the trees branches so tenderly.
This beautiful tiny house is called in French: «La Cabane de Jeanne.»
When we arrived I felt so much stress. I was everything but in peace! When I looked all around me I told myself: "Christophe, you have become a citizen! That’s why you’re struggling with stress. I had forgotten my childhood in the midst of the nature! Four days after our arrival an amount of peace came into my entire being!
I never forget these days and the tiny house « La Cabane de Jeanne.»

Now, each time I remember "La Cabane de Jeanne.", I can feel a well-being invading me!
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The tiny house - Thank you for your correction!

I remember when we decided to get out of (Possible to say this but in writing it is better to say leave) Paris for a couple of days! I was tired of this citizen stressing( not sure what you mean by citizen stressing, better to say stressful life) life! I needed to take a break and restore myself, my thougts, all my being (again not totally in-correct, but better to say every part of me) was asking me for this. We finally rent (rented) a beautiful, tiny house in the village of Rânes, in the department (region) of "l'Orne" in Normandy. The landscape where the tiny house was situated was so beautiful. (It was beautifully situated) Could you imagine a place without a noise (without noise), surrounded by trees, plants, and so many, (many)  kinds of flowers…? In the middle of all this, a tiny cat! I remember the birds singing in the morning, the perfume of the roses in the garden, the cute ( a lake is not cute) little lake quiet (quiet and peaceful lake, don't use too many adjectives) and peaceful, and the pontoon at the edge of the water where (remained) the small boat I used every day to relax myself remained ( which I used everyday to relax)! If the sun was shining every day its sunset was amazing too. The colors(american spelling of colour, english is Colour) remembered (reminded) me some romantic movies (of a romantic movie). Yes, the colors were wonderful. Contemplating the light of the sun through the trees, I felt like I was dreaming (also possible but I think better to say made me feel as if I was dreaming).



Everything was so quiet! The clouds in the sky were quiet as well as the fishes (fish, plural of fish is fish) in the little lake, the wind was blowing in the trees (tree branches, not both plural) branches so tenderly.
This beautiful tiny house is called in French: «La Cabane de Jeanne.»
When we arrived I felt so much stress. I was everything but in peace! When I looked all around me I told myself: "Christophe, you have become a citizen! That’s why you’re (better in writing to say you are) struggling with stress. I had forgotten my childhood in the midst of the(no the, in the midst of nature) nature! Four days after our arrival an amount of peace came into my entire being!
I never forgot these (those) days and the tiny house « La Cabane de Jeanne.»

Now, each time I remember "La Cabane de Jeanne.", I can feel a well-being invaded (invade) me! 


Well done, very small errors, but these tiny improvements will help you to write like a native english person :) !



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The tiny house - Thank you for your correction!

I remember when we decided to get out of Paris for a couple of days! I was tired of this citizen stressing life! I needed to take a break and restore myself, my thoughts, all my being was asking me for this. We finally rented a beautiful tiny house in the village of Rânes, in the department of "l'Orne" in Normandy. The landscape there was so beautiful. Could you imagine a place without noise, surrounded by greenery, and so many kinds of flowers…? In the middle of all this; a tiny cat! I remember the birdsong in the morning, the perfume of the roses in the garden, the cute little lake quiet and peaceful, and the pontoon at the edge of the water where the small boat I used every day to relax myself, remained! If the sun was shining every day its sunset was amazing too. The colors reminded me of some romantic movies. Yes the colors were wonderful. Contemplating the light of the sun through the trees, I felt like I was dreaming.



Everything was so quiet! The clouds in the sky were quiet as well as the fishes in the little lake, the wind was blowing in the trees branches so tenderly.
This beautiful tiny house is called in French: «La Cabane de Jeanne.»
When we arrived I felt so much stress. I was everything but in peace! When I looked all around me I told myself: "Christophe, you have become a citizen! That’s why you’re struggling with stress. I had forgotten my childhood in the midst of the nature! Four days after our arrival an amount of peace came into my entire being!
I never forgot these days and the tiny house « La Cabane de Jeanne.»

Now, each time I remember "La Cabane de Jeanne.", I feel a well-being invade me!

very well written!

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Merci beaucoup Laura !
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