First notebook entry: Introducing myself

I'm a college student in CSU, I'm twenty years old, born in Gui Zhou1 Province, southwest of China. My major subject is GIS2. I love playing soccer, and baseball and many other sports.  I'm friendly, outgoing and enthusiastic for ??? 3 My friend, wherever you come from, I want to make friends with you.  I will always give my heart to you, may we be 100%, in honesty and frankness in our communication and friendship.united and communicate4 with each other, and to learn from each other...

1.  This is the standard way of writing place names.  However the newer standard is, Guizhou.

2.  Don't use obscure abbreviations.  No one would know what you are talking about.  In your example of using, CSU we can infer that it is some kind of local university.  Over here it is California State University.  So it is better to spell out in full.  Remember your essay is read all over the world!

3.  What are you enthusiasitc about? Life? Meeting friends? Your sports activities?  You must give us the details. 

4.  I understand what you are trying to express and is persmissible in Chinese.  However the way you wrote it is like a love letter in English.  So this is my guess at what you are trying to say.  Whenever you are not sure, write in Chinese so that those like me who understands some Chinese can correct you better.  Anyway it is good to know you that you can be a friend.  Thanks for the invitation.  I accept. :)