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Education - each correction will be appreciated There has been no doubt that in recent years the level of education among school children has been significantly aggravated. Many children spend a time on the social media and with friends. They are not focused on their educational purposes and homework. What is more, teachers also have not enough good qualifications to teach their students effectively. There has been a significant amount of research on this subject during recent years which indicates that 75% of young people do not have any purpose to their future life. If they had an educational goal, they would try to do more to achieve welfare. It is a universally acknowledged fact that many teachers have not enough qualifications to teach children at school. As impartial research shows 55% of teachers have changed their qualifications after graduating study. This phenomenon demonstrates that current teachers had others goals during their study. If they planed being teachers during the study, they would better prepare to do their job. Of course, accurately predicting the future is practically impossible to do but it seems to be obvious that serious steps must be taken to improve educational system immediately. Firstly, more money should be spent to encourage the best students to be a teacher. Furthermore, the special public office must be appointed to focus more effectively on the current educational problems. Finally, teachers should by awarded for their job and well paid salary should be provided.

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Education - each correction will be appreciated

There has been no doubt that in recent years the level of education among school children has been significantly aggravated** (diminished? disrupted? ). Many children spend a [lot of] time on the social media and with friends. They are not focused on their educational pursuits and homework. What is more, teachers also [have not enough]*** good qualifications to teach their students effectively. There has been a significant amount of research on this subject during recent years, which indicates that 75% of young people do not have any future life objectives (**goals, pursuits, plans). If they had an educational goal, they would try to do more to achieve success**.

It is a universally acknowledged fact that many teachers [have not enough]*** qualifications to teach children at school. As impartial research shows, 55% of teachers have changed their qualifications after graduating study. This phenomenon demonstrates that current teachers had others goals during their study. If they had planned to become teachers during their studies, they would be better prepared to do their jobs.

Of course, accurately predicting the future is practically impossible to do, but it seems to be obvious that serious steps must be taken to improve the educational system immediately. Firstly, more money should be spent to encourage the best students to become teachers. Furthermore, a special public office must be appointed to focus more effectively on the current educational problems. Finally, teachers should be awarded for their jobs and a well-paid salary should be provided.


**what word in Polish would you use here? Perhaps there is a better translation than 'aggravated'.

***[have not enough] the rules may be different for BrEng, but in AmEng we would say [do not have enough]. However, it looks correct, but sounds strange (to me).

**Success fits better here, in my opinion. You could also say "...they would do more to succeed."   

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