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The bar chart below gives information about the proportion of Australian man and women in different age groups who exercised regularly in 2010.
Overall, the women who did physical activity regularly has the highest percentage at the age of 45 to 54. However, the percentage of the men fluctuated more than the women's, but the percentage at the age 65 and over of both two groups has close numbers.
As we can see from the bar chart, the highest percentage is at 53.3% for the age 45 to 54 in the female groups, the lowest is at 47.1% for the age 65 and over. Compared with the male groups, the female groups is more steady.
Looking at the male groups, there is the highest number at the age between 15 and 24, the number at the age 35 to 44 is the least, even less then 40%.
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Please help me to check this IELTS writing, thank you!!
The bar chart below gives information about the proportion of Australian man men and women in different age groups who exercised regularly in 2010.Overall, the women who did physical activity regularly has have the highest percentage at the age of 45 to 54. However, the percentages for of the men fluctuated more than the women's, but the percentages at the for ages 65 and over of for both two groups has are similar close numbers.
As we can see from the bar chart, the highest percentage is at 53.3% for the ages 45 to 54 in the female groups, while (or "and") the lowest is at 47.1% for the ages 65 and over. Compared with the male groups, the female groups is are more steady.
Looking at the male groups, there is the highest number is at the ages between 15 and 24, while (or "and") the number at the for ages 35 to 44 is the lowest least, even less then 40%.
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