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First notebook entry: Introducing myself I am a gentleman who major in Computer Science ^_^. For more reason of interesting and work ..etc, I need improve my English level. Now, I have some feel in learn English. Why? I think it's may be about I saw down total ten season of "Friends". Obviously, I'm just got so tiny step grow up... Help me, a poor programmer, a positive human.

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First notebook entry: Introducing myself

I am a gentleman1 guy who is majoring in Computer Science ^_^.

For more reason of interesting and work ..etc, Many reasons, for work, for personal interests, I need improve my English level.


Now that, I have some feel in the interest to learn English2. Why?, you might ask.   I think it's may be about because I saw down total ten seasons of "Friends".

Obviously, I'm just got so tiny step grow up... this is just a tiny little step...

Please help me, a this poor programmer :) , a positive human.3

1.  The word is too formal to be used in the context.  You are not writing a formal piece here.  So don't use it.  I say it because of other slang or informal terms you used elsewhere in your writing.

2.  You don't need to repeat "English" here.  It is understood from the previous sentences.  Although it is not incorrect grammartically, it is boring and shows your weakness in writing.  Repeat only if it is for emphasis which I did not see.  It would be better if you write in Chinese as well so that those who can read your language can correct you easily.  Sometimes it is very difficult to decipher someone's intent.

3.  A native English speaker will not write such conclusions of positive group thinking.  It shows that you are most probably Asian writer.  Your sentence in expressing your plea is very good for it makes a personal connection to the reader in helping you.  However the scratched out sentence is like the Chinese saying, 劃蛇添足.

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