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Writing task for IELTS Q: It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.(Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.) There are many people believed that it is true that some people are borned with certain talents. For instance, sometimes we can see the children perform better in the talent show although they are in a very young age, compared with the adults. It shows that these certain talents do work in the daily life. On the other hand, others claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. For them, every child has a equity statement, and they can reach their own achievement if they play enough efforts by themselves. From my perspective, I think it is significant to have the certain talents but that is not the only way to succeed. We still need other spirits such as hardworking, insistence, to make ourselves completely. Take myself into a example, I used to hate dancing which is because I always act like a machine and I am not able to get the right temple. It has been for a long time that I believed I am not suitable for dancing. However, my dancing teacher kept encouraging me to dance and telling me never give up. Because of the encouragement by her, I kept practicing even though I didn't dance well. After a long time for practicing, it turned out that even though I don't have a gift for dancing. I can still perform dancing to everyone by making effort in dancing. So my experience tells me that it is ok if you don't own a gift but it is necessary to practice hard. We need to remember that practice makes prefect.

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So In conclusion, my experience tells me shows that it is ok if you don't own a gift but it is necessary to practice hard. talent is not necessary as long as one is willing to work hard. We need to remember that practice makes prefect.

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There are Many people believed that it is true that some people are indeed borned with certain talents. For instance, sometimes we can see the young children perform better in the talent shows although they are in a very young age, as compared with the to adults. It shows that these certain talents do work exist in the our daily lives.

On the other hand, others claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. For them, They believe that every child has a equity statement, all children are born equal and they can reach their own achievement  goals if they play put in enough efforts by themselves.
From my perspective Personally, I think it is significant important to have the certain talents but that is not the only way to succeed. We still need other spirits such as hardworking, insistence, to make ourselves completely. Other qualities such as hard work and persistence also contribute greatly to our success. Take myself into a for example, I used to hate dancing which is because I always act like a machine and I am not able to get the right temple. my movements were mechanical and I was unable to keep to the right tempo. It has been for a long time that I always believed that I am not suitable for dancing. can never dance well. However, my dance teacher kept encouraging me to dance and by telling me not to never give up. Because of the With her encouragement by her, I kept practicing even though I didn't dance well initially. After a long time for practicing for a long time, it turned out that even though I don't have a gift for dancing. I can still perform dancing to everyone by making effort in dancing. I can dance well with enough practice even though it did not come to me naturally.

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