A hasty day
Today ,the weather is very cold,and I got up a little late.When I arrived to subway, I found that I fotget to bring metro card and then I must take ticket .It wasted me so much time.Because of the weather was cold ,many people get up late, so at that time , the people in the subway was all crowd next to the door. Maybe the crowding metro , a girl was fainted in subway ,all the people was so scared, and gave hands to her and hold her,and last ,the staffs took her to have a rest .Fortunately, It doesn't make accidents .
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A Hasty Day
Today the weather is very cold. Later on, I also found out that today would be a very chaotic day. Not only did I get up a late but when I arrived at the subway, I found that I forgot to bring my metro card.Hello! Good job so far. I just corrected the first sentence since I'm quite busy right now. If you need more help, feel free to sign up for a class on writing where I will help you edit your essay for 1 hour!
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Thanks for pointing that error out.
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A hasty day
Today ,the weather is very cold,and I got up a little late.When I arrived to subway, I found that I fotget to bring metro card and then I must take ticket .It wasted me so much time.Because of the weather was cold ,many people get up late, so at that time , the people in the subway was all crowd next to the door. Maybe the crowding metro , a girl was fainted in subway ,all the people was so scared, and gave hands to her and hold her,and last ,the staffs took her to have a rest .Fortunately, It doesn't make accidents .Today, the weather was very cold and I got up a little late. When I arrived at the subway, I realized that I forgot to bring my metro card and I had to buy a ticket. It was such a waste of time. Because it was so cold, a lot of people woke up late, so the metro was very crowded. It might have been because of the crowds, but a girl fainted in the subway. Everybody was scared and helped to support her. At last, subway staff took her somewhere to rest. Fortunately, it didn't cause and accident.
Good job. The writing was easy to understand, I just changed a few things to make it sound more natural. Subway and metro both mean the same thing, but usually I wouldn't switch back and forth between them in the same piece of writing. Keep Practicing!
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