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The Dragon Boat Festival Today is the traditional festival of China which people celebrated by Eating Zong-zi and dashing Dragon Boat .Zong-zi was made up of rice and meat .It is very delicious.Dashing Dragon Boat is very exciting.all of activities in honor of QuYuan. In chinese history ,he is a famous poet and celebrity from cultural in world . But his fate can not tolerate the then social comrade very miserably and finally jump a river to commit suicide.For warning the person he loves our country . In my mind it is not only a lengend ,butalso is a symbol that I love my country . I love my parents ,I love my friends ..I wanna be happy forever.The creation originates love....

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The Dragon Boat Festival

Today is the traditional festival of China which where people celebrated by eating Zong-zi (rice dumplings) and dashinghaving  Dragon Boat races .Zong-zi1 Rice dumplings  was are made up of from rice and meat.  It is very delicious.  Dashing Dragon Boat racing is the most very exciting all of the activities in honor of Qu Yuan. In chinese history ,He is was a famous poet and celebrity statesman from cultural in world in Chinese history. But his fate can not tolerate the then social comrade very miserably and finally jump a river to commit suicide. He committed suicide as a protest against the foolish policies of the king he served.   For warning the person he loves our country This proves his loyalty to his state.2. In my mind it this is not only a lengend ,butalso is a symbol that I love my country . I love my parents. I love my friends ..I wanna 3 want be happy forever. The creation originates love....4

1.  You have already told the readers what zongzi is.  So use it's English equivalent instead.

2.  Using "state" is much better than "country" since that time China was not unified as a country but a huge piece of land controlled by different regimes.  Qu Yuan was only loyal to his state of Chu, not to any other state such as the Chin, Chi etc.  Therefore to use "country" would be an error.

3.  "Wanna" is a slang.  Don't use slang when you are writing formal essays.

4.  I could not figure out what you are saying.  Like I tell some of your countrymen.  Write in Chinese so that others who also understand Chinese can help correcting your English easily and  accurately.

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..interesting history oppa!!.. i really want to go to your country some day!! :D

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