Description of a Device
The Delicio Compact is a kind of device that is often found in households and has been manufactured for convenience in everyday life. It is a cuboid shaped electric device, which is available in different colors. On one slender side, there is a water tank, on the other one a tap with a rack component at the bottom for mugs. On the top, there are different buttons and a component to put capsules into the machine. There is also a trash rack inside the device for empty capsules. The device works by filling up the tank with cold water, putting a mug on the rack and a capsule on the top. By pushing a button, water will be delivered by pressure through the capsule. The content from the capsule, mixed with water, comes out of the tap and pours into the mug, the empty capsule will be deposed in the trash rack as soon as a new capsule will be placed.
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Description of a Device
The Delicio Compact is a kind of device that is often found in households and has been, manufactured for convenience in everyday life. It is a cuboidcubic shaped electric device, which is available in different colors. On one slender side, there is a water tank, o. On the other one, a tap with a rack component at the bottom for mugs. On the top, there are different buttons and a component to put capsules into the machine. There is also a trash rack inside the device for empty capsules. The device works by filling up the tank with cold water, puttingplacing a mug on the rack, and a capsule onin the top. By pushing a button, water will be delivered bywith pressure through the capsule. The content from the capsule, mixed with water, comes out of the tap, and pours into the mug, t. The empty capsule will be deposed in the trash rack as soon as a new capsule will beis placed.This is very well done! Almost everything is 100% grammatically correct, but stylistically it's awkward. All changes that are green are changes that help things sound more natural. Yellow changes are necessary. Some notes:
1. A few times you had a "run on sentence" (two sentences that you tried to mash into one). This is a common thing for inexperienced writers to do, but is incorrect.
2. Sometimes (in green) I added a "," before the word "and". This is called an "oxford comma", and is used in American English.
3. "It is a cuboid shaped electric device, which is available in different colors." This whole sentence is unnatural. I would instead say something like "It is an electric, cube-shaped device, available in different colors." Also "cuboid" is a fancy word that is almost never used outside of math.
Let me know if I need to explain anything else! :)
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