[My trip in Sapporo City. 110]
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I went to Otaru City from Sapporo City by train for about half an hour. Otaru is one of the popular sightseeing spot in Hokkaido area and easy to accuses. There are many attractions as well.
I’m introducing The Temiya Line, which was a former narrow gauge railroad linking Minami-Otaru Station and Temiya Station which both freight (coal, marine products) and passengers. The Temiya Line closed in 1985 but parts of the tracks have been preserved.
There were quite visitors all around. I like that, it’s good for the taking photos of memorable own trips.
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Would you mind correcting my essay? If you were me, how would you go about writing it? Which part should I describe in detail? I hope my explanations are clear. I hope you can understand them.
(Part Five) I went to Otaru City from Sapporo City by train, which took about 30 minutes. for about half an hour. Otaru is one of the most popular sightseeing spots in the Hokkaido area, and is easy to access accuses. There are many attractions as well. I’m introducing The Temiya Line (I'm not exactly sure what you mean when you say you're "introducing" the line? Maybe a better way to say it would be, "There is a line called The Temiya Line, which was a ..."), which was a former narrow gauge railroad linking Minami-Otaru Station and Temiya Station, which both carry freight (coal, marine products) and passengers. The Temiya Line closed in 1985 but parts of the tracks have been preserved. There were quite a few visitors all around. I like that, and it’s good for the taking memorable photos of memorable your trips.
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Would you mind correcting my essay? If you were me, how would
you go about writing it?
Which part should I describe in detail? I hope my explanations are clear. I hope you can understand them.
(Part Five)
I went to Otaru City from Sapporo City by train for about half an hour. Otaru is one of the popular sightseeing spot in Hokkaido area and easy to accuses. There are many attractions as well.
I’m introducing The Temiya Line, which was a former narrow gauge railroad linking Minami-Otaru Station and Temiya Station which both freight (coal, marine products) and passengers. The Temiya Line closed in 1985 but parts of the tracks have been preserved.
There were quite visitors all around. I like that, it’s good for the taking photos of memorable own trips.
you go about writing it?
Which part should I describe in detail? I hope my explanations are clear. I hope you can understand them.
(Part Five)
I went to Otaru City from Sapporo City by train for about half an hour. Otaru is one of the popular sightseeing spot in Hokkaido area and easy to accuses. There are many attractions as well.
I’m introducing The Temiya Line, which was a former narrow gauge railroad linking Minami-Otaru Station and Temiya Station which both freight (coal, marine products) and passengers. The Temiya Line closed in 1985 but parts of the tracks have been preserved.
There were quite visitors all around. I like that, it’s good for the taking photos of memorable own trips.
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Would you mind correcting my essay? If you were me, how would
you go about writing it?
Which part should I describe in detail? I hope my explanations are clear. I hope you can understand them.
(Part Five)
I went to Otaru City from Sapporo City by train for about half an hour. Otaru is one of the popular sightseeing spot in Hokkaido area and easy to accuses. There are many attractions as well.
I’m introducing The Temiya Line, which was a former narrow gauge railroad linking Minami-Otaru Station and Temiya Station which both freight (coal, marine products) and passengers. The Temiya Line closed in 1985 but parts of the tracks have been preserved.
There were quite visitors all around. I like that, it’s good for the taking photos of memorable own trips.
you go about writing it?
Which part should I describe in detail? I hope my explanations are clear. I hope you can understand them.
(Part Five)
I went to Otaru City from Sapporo City by train for about half an hour. Otaru is one of the popular sightseeing spot in Hokkaido area and easy to accuses. There are many attractions as well.
I’m introducing The Temiya Line, which was a former narrow gauge railroad linking Minami-Otaru Station and Temiya Station which both freight (coal, marine products) and passengers. The Temiya Line closed in 1985 but parts of the tracks have been preserved.
There were quite visitors all around. I like that, it’s good for the taking photos of memorable own trips.
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Would you mind correcting my essay? If you were me, how would
you go about writing it?
Which part should I describe in detail? I hope my explanations are clear. I hope you can understand them.
(Part Five)
I went to Otaru City from Sapporo City by train for about half an hour. Otaru is one of the popular sightseeing spot in Hokkaido area and easy to accuses. There are many attractions as well.
I’m introducing The Temiya Line, which was a former narrow gauge railroad linking Minami-Otaru Station and Temiya Station which both freight (coal, marine products) and passengers. The Temiya Line closed in 1985 but parts of the tracks have been preserved.
There were quite visitors all around. I like that, it’s good for the taking photos of memorable own trips.
you go about writing it?
Which part should I describe in detail? I hope my explanations are clear. I hope you can understand them.
(Part Five)
I went to Otaru City from Sapporo City by train for about half an hour. Otaru is one of the popular sightseeing spot in Hokkaido area and easy to accuses. There are many attractions as well.
I’m introducing The Temiya Line, which was a former narrow gauge railroad linking Minami-Otaru Station and Temiya Station which both freight (coal, marine products) and passengers. The Temiya Line closed in 1985 but parts of the tracks have been preserved.
There were quite visitors all around. I like that, it’s good for the taking photos of memorable own trips.
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Would you mind correcting my essay? If you were me, how would
you go about writing it?
Which part should I describe in detail? I hope my explanations are clear. I hope you can understand them.
(Part Five)
I went to Otaru City from Sapporo City by train for about half an hour. Otaru is one of the popular sightseeing spot in Hokkaido area and easy to accuses. There are many attractions as well.
I’m introducing The Temiya Line, which was a former narrow gauge railroad linking Minami-Otaru Station and Temiya Station which both freight (coal, marine products) and passengers. The Temiya Line closed in 1985 but parts of the tracks have been preserved.
There were quite visitors all around. I like that, it’s good for the taking photos of memorable own trips.
you go about writing it?
Which part should I describe in detail? I hope my explanations are clear. I hope you can understand them.
(Part Five)
I went to Otaru City from Sapporo City by train for about half an hour. Otaru is one of the popular sightseeing spot in Hokkaido area and easy to accuses. There are many attractions as well.
I’m introducing The Temiya Line, which was a former narrow gauge railroad linking Minami-Otaru Station and Temiya Station which both freight (coal, marine products) and passengers. The Temiya Line closed in 1985 but parts of the tracks have been preserved.
There were quite visitors all around. I like that, it’s good for the taking photos of memorable own trips.
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