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Health and sickness Could someone correct this entry, please? In the first world people live much more time than they lived fifty years ago and when they become an old man or women they look like younger than people looked like many years ago. There are several reasons to explain it. First, people have enough food to feed and children have a good diet to grow. Secondly, the development of medicine has allowed that many diseases have disappeared or have been controlled. Thirdly, people have more free time, it makes they have time to enjoy, consequently this is good for their health. On the other hand, there are other new diseases because of our life style. Many people suffer stress, depression and other mental illness. Also heart attacks have increased considerably and many more people suffer from some types of cancer. Another problem at the present time is obesity. The most people are overweight the most people suffer diabetes or high blood pressure. Moreover almost fifty percent of our children are overweight. The main causes of childhood obesity are two: In the first place, the reduction of the level of physical activities The second place, the increased consumption of foods which are high in sugar and fat. Mass Media says that Spain is the second country where people live more time .From my personal point of view,a good public system of health has contributed to increased our life expectancy; but unfortunately this is changing due the increase in poverty and less investment in health from government. In conclusion, the progress in medicine and the improvement the nutrition have allowed people live more time but like people are older they have some illness that they didn’t suffer when they died younger.

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In the first world, people live much more time longer than they lived fifty years ago and when they grow old they look like younger than people looked like many years ago.

There are several reasons to explain it. this:
Firstly, people have enough food to feed eat and children can grow because they have a good diet.
Secondly, the development of medicine has allowed ensured that many diseases have disappeared or have been controlled.
Thirdly, people have more free time to enjoy. Consequently this is good for their health.
On the other hand, there are other new diseases which are being caused because of due to our life style. Many people suffer from stress, depression and/or other mental illness. The rate of heart attacks have increased considerably and many more people suffer from some different types of cancer.
Another problem of this time is obesity. The most more people who are overweight, the most more people suffer diabetes or high blood pressure. Moreover almost fifty percent of our children are overweight. The two main causes of childhood obesity are two:
In the first place,  The reduction of the level of physical activities and the increased consumption of foods which are high in sugar and fat.
Mass Media says that Spain has the second highest life expectancy. From my personal point of view, a good public system of health has contributed to increased our life expectancy, but unfortunately this is changing due the increase in poverty and less investment in health by the government.
In conclusion, the progress in medicine and improvement in nutrition have allowed people live for longer, but as people grow older they face some illness which they didn’t suffer in the past, when they died younger.
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Health and sickness

Could someone correct this entry, please?

In the first world, people live much longer than they lived fifty years ago, and when they become an old man or women, they look younger than people looked many years ago.

There are several reasons to explain this.
First, people have enough food to eat and children have a good diet to grow.
Second, because of the development of medicine, many diseases have disappeared or have been controlled.
Third, people have more free time, which means they have time to enjoy. Consequently this is good for their health.
On the other hand, there are other new diseases because of our lifestyle. Many people suffer from stress, depression and other mental illness. Also heart attacks have increased considerably, and many more people suffer from some types of cancer.
Another problem at the present time is obesity. The more people are overweight, the more people suffer from diabetes or high blood pressure. Moreover almost fifty percent of our children are overweight. The main causes of childhood obesity are two: the reduction of the level of physical activities and the increased consumption of foods which are high in sugar and fat.
Mass Media says that Spain is the country where people live the second longest time. From my personal point of view, a good public health system has contributed to increasing our life expectancy; but unfortunately this is changing due to the increase in poverty and less investment in health from government.
In conclusion, the progress in medicine and the improvement in nutrition have allowed people to live longer. But while people are living longer, they have some illnesses that they didn’t suffer from when they died younger.

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