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I’d recommend that we should purchase some new equipment from this exhibition, which includes 2 PowerPoint and 10 microphones. The same kinds of facilities our conference room have been using are complete aging. That has caused a bad impact during the meeting. So making an order for them is needed.
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Email 07-purchase
I’d recommend that we should purchase some new equipment from this exhibition, which includes 2 PowerPoint and 10 microphones. The same kinds of facilities our conference room have been using are complete aging. That has caused a bad impact during the meeting. So making an order for them is needed.Hi Jane, I only noticed one word I would delete. (complete) This is very well written!
I am going to write this in a similar way below, with a few changes - I hope the words that I use are helpful.
Email 07-purchase
I would recommend that we should purchase some new equipment from this exhibition, which includes 2 PowerPoints and 10 microphones. The same equipment that we are now using in our conference room is ready to be replaced. That has caused a bad impact during the meeting. So making an order for them is needed.
Great! Nice work. :-)
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