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Iād been in Hokkaido last September traveling for six days. My itinerary would have four days tripping , but I couldnāt go back to my home, due to the biggest typhoon. I was careless and unexpected it. Usually, in Japan, most of the typhoons come to July, August and September.
--> I went to Hokkaido last September for a six-day trip. My itinerary included four days of traveling. However, I could not make it back home because of a typhoon. It was the biggest typhoon to ever hit Japan, and I was careless not to expect it because most typhoons occur at around July to September.
I predicted to that the typhoon wouldnāt come Hokkaido area that days, however it came that. Iād say that when you plan to visit Japan these seasons, you should have some insurances for the airplane. If you have one, you can take the instead of the airplane ticket, the staying place and some allowance.
--> I had predicted that the typhoon would not hit Hokkaido during those few days, but unfortunately it did. If youāre planning to visit Japan during those few months, you should at least purchase some travel insurance.
Recently, we couldnāt expect the any kinds of disasters( typhoon, flood, Forest fire and etc)all of the world. We may prepare to move when it come to our places in the future.
--> Recently, we have become bad at predicting the occurrence of natural disasters (such as typhoons, floods, and forest fires). We must be prepared to move whenever disaster strikes.
[I extended to come back to my home. 105 ]
Would you mind correcting my essay? If you were me, how wouldyou go about writing it?
Which part should I describe in detail? I hope my explanations are clear. I hope you can understand them.
I found a few more things to correct :) Nice job!
Iād been in Hokkaido last September traveling for six days. My itinerary would have four days tripping , but I couldnāt go back to my home, due to the biggest typhoon. I was careless and unexpected didn't expect it. Usually, in Japan, most of the typhoons come to July, August and September.
I predicted to that the typhoon wouldnāt come Hokkaido area that days, however it came that.
Iād say that when you plan to visit Japan these seasons, you should have some insurances for the airplane. If you have one, you can take the instead of the airplane ticket, the staying place and some allowance. If you have it, you can get a hotel room and some spending money to compensate for the plane ticket. (This is how I understood this sentence)
Recently, we couldnāt expect the any kinds of disasters( typhoon, flood, Forest fire and etc)all of the world. We may prepare to move when it come to our places in the future.
[I extended to come back to my home. 105 ]
Would you mind correcting my essay? If you were me, how wouldyou go about writing it?
Which part should I describe in detail? I hope my explanations are clear. I hope you can understand them.
Iād been I was in Hokkaido last September traveling for six days. My itinerary would have included four days tripping of traveling, however I couldnāt go back to my home due to the biggest a large typhoon. I was careless and unexpected it. Usually, in Japan, most of the typhoons come to happen in July, August and September.
I predicted to that the typhoon wouldnāt come to Hokkaido area that those days, however it came that but it did.
Iād say that when you plan to visit Japan these seasons during this season, you should have buy some insurances for the airplane flight insurance. If you have one, you can take the instead of the airplane ticket, the staying place and some allowance. (I'm not really sure how to correct this sentence)
Recently, we couldnāt haven't expected the any kinds of disasters (typhoons, floods, forest fires, etc) all of the world. We may prepare to move when it come to our places area in the future.
These are just some minor errors. Your overall meaning was pretty clear.
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