Reducing poverty to become a devolved country PART 1
Nowadays, Colombia, like many South American nations, is fighting against poverty. People who are considered poor in the country are those who earn less than 241,000 pesos a month, which is nearly 28% of the Colombian population (El Heraldo, 2017). On the other hand, according to Departamento Administrativo Nacional de Estadística (DANE, 2016) those who are seen as extremely poor earn about 114,000 pesos per month and are 8.5% of the country’s population. These figures have been influenced by several factors such as unemployment, displacement, and inequality. Poverty in Colombia is a problem because it arises from the difference in income and opportunity between the poor and the rich, the lack of access to safe birth control methods for low income families and the deficiency in support from the government to farmers, craftsmen, and small Colombian companies. However, there are a number of solutions that can help to solve this matter.
Firstly, the government must create educational polices for people’s welfare. One of the most effective strategies that could be established is to ensure that every citizen gets high-quality education. Poverty in Colombia could be eradicated when all the citizens, regardless of their social class, have access to education since childhood. By creating these policies, inequality might be reduced, and all Colombians would have the same opportunities, no matter where they come from. For instance, in the Finnish educational system, all children must attend school from the age of seven, until they turn 16 (El Tiempo, 2014). Besides that, the government of Finland guarantees free access to education and medical care, food subsidy, books and all the materials required (BBC, 2015). This shows that education quality of a country is directly influenced by its poverty index and development; therefore, the government could eliminate poverty by guaranteeing that every child gets a high-quality education in school, goes to university, and earns more as an adult.
NOTE: HI, I NEED COMMENTS ABOUT THIS ESSAY THAT I WROTE, WHAT DO YOU THINK ABOUT THE TOPIC AND THE SOLUTIONS PROVIDED? THANKS A LOT
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As a brief summary,
you have been trying to suggest a solution to tackle with the problem associated with poor (or ultra poor) Colombian, which are indicated in the previous studies.
The reasons you picked up are unemployment, displacement and inequality in the Colombia. In particular, you have pointed out the opportunity difference between the rich and the poor, with one example safe birth control. In addition, you have mentioned the luck of government supports to farmers, craftmen and small companies.
The first solution is education policies to improve education quality in Colombia. With a example of Finland, you suggest that a fair opportunity to learn might reduce inequality.
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As my comment for the first solution part,
does this Finland evidence really support your statement? I think that it support the existence of some policies but doesn't support the causal impact of an education policy on the poor. It might be helpful to find an another evidence or to describe a story directly related to the causal relationship for reducing the poor people ratio if your genuine interest comes from it.
Good work by the way, take care!
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