Letter

Hi everybody,
I would like you to have a look at this letter and tell me whether there are some mistakes or not.
Thanks in advance

Dear Pat,

Thanks for your letter about the project on family life.
In the past, it was mothers who did the household chores and looked after the children, while fathers worked and earned money.  Luckily in recent times, this has changed. Currently, both mothers and fathers do all of the household activities like raising the children and cooking family meals. Also, both parents work to earn money for the family.
When it comes to Christmas, all the family gets together on 25th December in the family home.
I'm looking forward to seeing you.

Best wishes

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Hi everybody,
I would like you to please have a look at this letter and tell me whether there are any mistakes or not.
Thanks in advance

Dear Pat,

Thanks for your letter about a project on family life.
In the past, mothers were the ones who did the household chores and fathers were the ones who worked and earned [the] money . Also, mothers looked after their children. Luckily, this imbalance has changed. In the present day , both mothers and fathers carry out all types of family duties, such as working to provide for their families, bringing up the children, and doing the cooking.
When it comes to Christmas, all the family gets together on 25th December in the biggest house.
I'm looking forward to seeing you.

Best wishes