Please help me to correct the Happy Moon Festival Wish

The following content is a Happy Moon Festival Wish, including in both Chinese and English, which I wrote several weeks ago. However, I don’t know whether (<-- nice use of whether here) the English that I use is right (not wrong but correct is better choice here) correct or not. So, please help me to correct them (plural) if having it should have I made any mistakes. Thank you.


一年月色最明夜，千里人心共賞時。
The brightest full-moon night, the 15th day of the 8th month of the lunar calendar, is enjoyed by everyone around the world.

一陣子不見，近來你一切都順利嗎？
We have been out of touch too long. What have you been up to lately?

話說回來，
Anyway,

雖然人生不相見，但彼此相望的卻是同樣的月亮。
Although having been unable to meet each other, we all both ("all" is correct, but I suppose you are talking about two people, so "both") can admire the beauty of the same moon.

而我也拿著酒詢問天老爺，這皎潔月光已出現多少次了呢？
With a cup glass (cup = 茶杯) of wine, I ask the blue sky, ‘How many times will the full moon rise?’

只能藉著天上一輪 明月，請徐徐晚風把我的祝福帶給你。
Gentle breeze would give all my best blessing to you via the bright moon on the sky.

希望我思念的你能夠一切圓滿，
I wish you a joyful and successful life.

即使天各一方，也能共享這美好的月夜。
Even though far apart, we are still able to share the enchanting moon together.

（離別一何久，幾度過中秋，
海上生明月，天涯共此時，
明月幾時有？把酒問青天，
但願人長久，千里共嬋娟。）

祝你 中秋節快樂！
The Moon Festival is coming. I wish you a happy Mid-Autumn Festival!