A short military career
I joined the army as a conscript when I was 20. At that time, I was a student in college. Without waiting for the end of the last course, I joined the army. There, for 6 months, I took the basic combat training. Six months later, I signed a contract and immediately became a drill sergeant. I was in charge of a section of 10 people. A year later I became a health instructor. My work was to monitor the health of soldiers and officers all of the company. Then my post was abolished and I had to become an operator. In this position, I do not have soldiers in command and I have my own sergeant.
After several field training exercises, it was decided to put me on job interpreter and sent me to Moscow for training in English. And in the end, three years after the start of my military career, I'm here on a business trip, in Moscow.
In the future I want to get a higher education and become an officer. Well, for now, I just a student in uniform.
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A short military career
I joined the army as a conscript when I was 20.Есть противоречие между концептами «I joined» и «conscript». «Joined» означает, что Вы добровольно пошли в армию, а под «conscript» понимается тот, кто был призван в армию, то есть, недобровольно.
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A short military career
I joined the army as a conscript when I was 20. At that time, I was a student in college. Without waiting for the end of the last course, I joined the army. There, for 6 months, I took the basic combat training. Six months later, I signed a contract and immediately became a drill sergeant. I was in charge of a section of 10 people. A year later I became a health instructor. My work was to monitor the health of soldiers and officers all of the company. Then my post was abolished and I had to become an operator. In this position, I do not have soldiers in command and I have my own sergeant.After several field training exercises, it was decided to put me on job interpreter and sent me to Moscow for training in English. And in the end, three years after the start of my military career, I'm here on a business trip, in Moscow.
In the future I want to get a higher education and become an officer. Well, for now, I just a student in uniform.
Hi! This is well written. In the first highlighted part, you should say "make me a" (job interpreter). In the second part, say "send" instead of sent. The third part should be "I'm" or "I am".
Good job, молодец! Thanks for adding the photo, it is cool to see!
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A short military career
I joined the army as a conscript when I was 20. At that time I was a student in college. Without waiting for the end of the last course I joined the army. There, for 6 months, I took basic combat training. Six months later I signed a contract and immediately became a drill sergeant. I was in charge of a section of 10 soldiers. A year later I became a health instructor. My work was to monitor the health of soldiers and officers throughout the company. Then my post was abolished and I had to become an operator. In this position, I do not have soldiers in command and I have my own sergeant.After several field training exercises, it was decided to put me on a job interpreting and to send me to Moscow for training in English. And in the end, three years after the start of my military career, I'm here on a business trip, in Moscow.
In the future I want to get a higher education and become an officer. Well, for now, I am just a student in uniform.
Very well written!
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Others have already corrected so I won't bother since you have very few things needing correcting but just wanted to say it is well written and the picture is great!
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