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People can not live their life without people Have you ever heard how does dry skin affect your skin? Dry skin caused by air and frictions. When the Autumn comes, air would be getting dry and it´s same as in the refrigerator. Just imagine if a food is in that without any wrap, what´s gonna happen? It would be dry and would be bad. A skin is same. If you are outside without anything instead of wrap, your skin would be dry. And also, you´ll be dry skin if you use oil cleansing because it can be wash so well and also wash too much for dry skin. And if you wash with it, when you done it, use a towel and your skin get dry then your skin react that your skin is drying now and it would try to protect from damage of outside so your skin become hard. If your skin get hard what´s gonna happen next is not to penetrate any lotions because lotions can penetrate in soft skin. So your skin is dry and lotions don´t penetrate into your skin and it means, it would be more dry and what is gonna happen next is that your skin is getting not to be able to protect from damage of outside. There are a lot of damage outside for example, rays from the sun and PM2.5 which is polluted air from China and frictions and dusts and so on. So if your skin is easy to take damage you´ll be easy to absorb rays from the sun which is caused by spots and wrinkles and saggy and polluted air as well. So that means, your skin would get old so fast because your skin is dry. So it´s important to be always moisture your skin.

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So if your skin is easily to takes damage you´ll be easily to absorb rays from the sun  which is caused by spots, and wrinkles, and sagging and polluted air as well. So because your skin is dry that means, your skin would get old so fast will age faster. So it´s important to be always moisturize your skin.
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Have you ever heard of how does dryness skin can affect your skin?
Dry skin is caused by air and frictions.
When the Autumn comes,the air would be getting becomes dry and it´s same as in like the inside of a refrigerator.
Just imagine if a food is were left in that there without any wrap, what´s gonna would happen? It would become dry and would be bad.
A skin is the same. If you are outside without anything instead of "wrap", your skin would will become dry.
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Just a few extra notes; Try to avoid using the word "gonna" in formal writing. Never start a sentence with the word "and", similarly try not to start the sentence with "so" too frequently. Try to keep your sentences simple. You have a lot of run-on sentences which makes it difficult to follow clearly. English is much more specific than japanese when dealing with dropping words where the context is somewhat obvious. This means in some cases it's necessary to restate the subjects, rather than replacing them with words like "it"
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And also, you´ll be have dry skin if you use oil cleansers because it they can be wash so well and also wash too much for dry skin.
And if you wash with it, when you done it, using a towel and to dry your skin get dry can then cause your to skin react, that making your skin is drying now and it would try in attempt to protect from the damage of the outside so your skin become hard. If your skin get hardens what´s gonna will happen next is that not to lotions will not be able to penetrate any lotions because lotions can can only penetrate in soft skin. So now your skin is dry and lotions don´t penetrate into your skin, which and it means, it would will be more dry and what is gonna happen next is that your skin is getting not to won't be able to protect from the damage of the outside. There are a lot of things that can damage skin outside. for example, rays from the sun and PM2.5 which is polluted air from China, and friction,s and dust,s and so on.

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