Can someone correct my Mandarin homework please?
I just need to talk, in very basic Mandarin, about my personal life. Is there any way this can sound more natural and are there any mistakes? (It's written with traditional characters).
你好！我叫伊桑，姓葉。我是英國人，是威斯敏斯特大學的學生。我學習翻譯，法語和中文。我會說法語，英語，漢語，和威爾士語。我在咖啡店工作。我爸爸是木工。我媽媽沒有工作。我哥哥是學生。我喜歡喝奶茶，但是不喜歡喝咖啡因為太苦了。星期六我和我的朋友喜歡出去；明天我和我的男朋友去游泳要是天氣不太冷。我們去吃飯要是他有時間。
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Can someone correct my Mandarin homework please?
I just need to talk, in very basic Mandarin, about my personal life. Is there any way this can sound more natural and are there any mistakes? (It's written with traditional characters).你好！我叫葉伊桑，姓葉。我是英國人, 現在是個威斯敏斯特大學的學生。我學專業於習翻譯，也在念中法語和中文。我會因此會說法語，英語，Understood since you are British 中文漢語，和威爾士語。我在咖啡店工作。我爸爸是个木工/匠。我媽媽沒有工作是家庭主婦。我哥哥是學生。我喜歡喝奶茶 而但是不喜歡喝咖啡, 味道因為太苦了。每星期六我和我的朋友喜歡出去聊聊；如果明天我和我的男朋友去游泳要是天氣不太冷[的話], 就和男朋友去游泳。還有, 如果他有空, 我們去吃飯要是他有時間。
1. When the context is clear, you can omit the pronouns, otherwise sounds like you are talking a little tyke.
2. Unlike English, you omit the pronoun, "I", "me" for Chinese familial terms. They are rigidly defined in terms of oneself.
3. Unless it is a command, as in English, it is preferable to say "have dinner" rather than "eat dinner" since it is understood that you are eating and not twiddling with the food. So 我喜歡奶茶 is understood that it is drinking it rather than using it for something else, if so you then explicitly state so.
4. I won't say you are entirely incorrect since I can understand what you wrote and thus able to correct you. To be good in translation, you must know intimately about the cultures of the source and target languages. I am sure they must have taught you in class that translation is not just word by word translation only.
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I just need to talk, in very basic Mandarin, about my personal life. Is there any way this can sound more natural and are there any mistakes? (It's written with traditional characters). 你好！我叫伊桑，姓葉。我是英國人，是威斯敏斯特大學的學生。我學習翻譯、法語和中文。我會說法語、英語、漢語、和威爾士語。我在咖啡店工作。我爸爸是木工。我媽媽沒有工作。我哥哥是學生。我喜歡喝奶茶，但是不喜歡喝咖啡因為太苦了。星期六我和我的朋友喜歡出去；明天我和我的男朋友去游泳，要是天氣不太冷的话。我們去吃飯，如果他有時間。
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整体上，这篇短文你写的很好。
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好好学，继续努力，为什么不用简体？
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