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Please help me to correct my sentense!! I am hitting the books really hard, so that I master English. So I want you to cooperate in order to do that. If you help me, I will help you mastering Japanese. Background Hello, I'm Takafumi Tsugawa, and today I'd like to talk about Professor Aoyagi and his work to create a injections that mimics mosquito's stings. Speaking of injections, people usually may refuse to hit it because it is so painful and a burden on patients. Some of them may refuse to hospital by reason of hating injections. On the other hands, not only when you catch a cold and have the vaccination, there are many people who have to inject under the skin every day. For example, person with diabetes have to inject under the skin to administer insulin many times a day. So research of painless injections was advanced for such people. You have some background information on painless injections. Now let's look at the focus of Aoyagi's research. Research question How should he develop a painless injection ? Methods and Data 1. He discovered the fact that a pain by injections is due to structure of needle. 2. His research team studied structure of mosquito's stings. 3. They discovered that mosquito's stings have two jagged needles and a normal needle. 4. Many companies refused the development of needles since it is different to develop. 5. But a small factory in a town produced it by the latest abrasive techniques. 6. It enabled to puncture an exact location. Conclusions and Future Research Actually it enabled to administer a drug without feeling pain. As of 2016, for the achievement, it has been shipped one million. Scientists aim to administer anyone, anywhere and expand cosmetics in future.

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Please help me to correct my sentense!! sentences!

I am hitting the books really hard, so that I in order to  master English. (You  are on the way of mastering, so it's purpose not result)

So I want you to cooperate in order to do that. If you help me,  I would apprieciate if you can help me, in return, I will help you mastering Japanese. ( in polite way, cooperate is like a team member who have to work with you)
Background
Hello, I'm Takafumi Tsugawa, and today I'd like to talk about Professor Aoyagi and his work to on createing a injections that mimics mosquito's stings.
Speaking of Refer to injections, people usually may refuse to hit it because it is so painful and is a burden on patients. bother to them.

( injectionって”する動詞”みたいです、そして、この文句の中心はこの動作をめぐる)

Some of them may even refuse to go to hospital because by reason of they hatinge injections. (Above people is normal way--refuse, but here some of them should be more serious--refuse to go to hospital) --








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part 2 On the other hands, However,  ( "on the other hand ”is not like" 一方” which has the opposite meaning, here you should use contrast) not only when you catch a cold and or have the receive a vaccination, but also there are many the people who have to take daily injection to maintain their health conditions.under the skin every day. (injection itself means under skin, so omit)

For example, person with diabetes diabetics have to take injection many times a dayunder the skin to administer control insulin level. (Here to place "many times a day" after verb in order to make meaning clearly) 

So the research of painless injections was advanced for such people. (I don't think it should be "advanced" here, sounds weird, should be "nessary“ or ”benifit“ etc,  can you give me the original Japanese word?)
Now Yyou have some background information on painless injections. Now lLet's look at the focus of Aoyagi's research.
Research question
How should could he develop a painless injection ?---

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Here is the second part:

 Now that you have some background information on painless injections, Now let's look at the focus of Aoyagi's research.

Research question
How should could he develop a painless injection ?

Methods and Data
1. He discovered the fact that a pain by injections is due to the structure of the needle.
2. His research team studied structure of mosquito's stings.
3. They discovered that mosquito's stings have two jagged needles and a normal needle.
4. Many companies refused the development of his new needles since because it is was different to develop. 
5. But a small factory in a town produced it by with the latest abrasive techniques.
6. It enabled doctors to puncture an exact location.

Conclusions and Future Research 
Actually it enabled to This development made it possible to administer a drug without feeling pain. As of 2016, for the achievement, it has been shipped one million I am not quite sure what you are trying to say here. Perhaps:As of 2016, one million of these needles have been shipped. Scientists aim to administer anyone, anywhere, and expand cosmetics in future.


Your English is really good! This was a fascinating entry. I hope my corrections help. Good luck, and keep hitting the books! You'll master English in no time! 

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Is it your thesis? :) Next time, pls seperate in several parts so it's easy for correction.
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part 3 Methods and Data
1. He discovered the fact that a the pain by from injections is due to the structure of the needle. (the following is the fact itself, so omit. )
2. His research team studied structure of mosquito's stings.
3. They discovered that mosquito's stings have two jagged needles and a normal needle.
4. Many companies refused the to developement of this new needles since it is different from previous technology. (or you want to say it is difficult for development?)
5. But a small town factory in a town produced it by the latest abrasive techniques.
6. It enabled nurses to puncture on an exact location.

Conclusions and Future Research
Actually it As a result, the new needle enabled to administer a drug without feeling pain feeling. As of 2016, for the achievement, it has been shipped one million needles have been conveyed to the hospital. Scientists aim to administer anyone, anywhere and expand to cosmetics market in future.

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