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Could you please correct it? Thx! -Suppose you are asked to give advice on whether to attend a vocational college or a university, write an essay to state your opinion. In China, many people hold a point that students with high grades are supposed to attend a university for further education, while only those who can not study well in high schools would have no choice but to go to a vocational college. I never agree with them. People should view the two choices equally because both of the two kinds of students play vital roles in the society. And whether to attend a vocational college or a university depends solely on the students themselves, but not the grades. As far as I'm concerned, for those students who would like to learn about practical technology and find a fitted post as soon as possible to become more experienced, vocational colleges can suit them well. However, students who expect a more scientific learning environment, easier chances to conduct researches or opportunities to acquire further education, to attend a university can be a better choice. Besides, we should give an equal priority to the two kind of schools cause students are born to be unique and should not be put too much pressure on what they are supposed to do. To sum up, it is of great importance for students to figure out what they really want, what person they expect to be and which position they'd like to take in the future. Only in this way can they take better control of their own life.

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Could you please correct it? Thx!

-Suppose you are asked to give advice on whether to attend a vocational college or a university, write an essay to state your opinion.

In China, many people hold the point of view that students with high grades are supposed to attend a university for further education, while only those who can not study well in high schools would have no choice but to go to a vocational college. I have  never agreed with them. People should view the two choices equally because both of the two kinds of students play vital roles in the society. And whether to attend a vocational college or a university depends solely on the students themselves, but not the grades.
As far as I'm concerned, for those students who would like to learn about practical technology and find a suitable position as soon as possible to become more experienced, vocational colleges can suit them well. However, for students who expect a more scientific learning environment, easier chances to conduct researches or opportunities to acquire further education, to attending a university can be a better choice.
Besides, we should give an equal priority to the two kind of schools because students are born to be unique and should not be put under too much pressure in what they are supposed to do.
To sum up, it is of great importance for students to figure out what they really want, what kind of person they expect to be and which position (job? career?) they'd like to take in the future. Only in this way can they take better control of their own life.
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In my oppinion "vocational colleges can suit them well" should be "vocational colleges COULD suit them well."---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- However, students who expect a more scientific learning environment, easier chances to conduct researches or opportunities to acquire further education, to attend a university can be a better choice. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- If we make the sentence more simple, then the subject and the predicate don't agree. Look: ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- However, students to attend a university can be a better choice. Therefor we should put FOR before students. ------------------------------------------------------ to the kindS of schools... -------------------------------------- what KIND OF person they expect to be

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