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I want to have a camera i had made my determination to buy it .and take down my life. As time goes by, 20years has gone. the memory just in my mind, but when i become forgetable,how can i save the beautiful things? now, i will save my money from now on,and try my best to get a part-time job. camera is waitting for me!~

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I want to have a camera!

i had made my determination (determined) to buy it and take down   (capture) my life.

As time goes by, 20years has gone. the memory just in my mind,
but when i become forgetable,how can i save the beautiful things?
Twenty years has passed by, and even though the memories are still in my mind, when I am older- how can I save these precious memories?

now, i (Always captial I when used as a pronoun) will save my money from now on,and try my best to get a part-time job.
camera is waitting for me!~
From now on, I will try my best to get a part-time job and save my money! The camera is calling for me!
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I want to have a camera

I have made my decision determination to buy it (or: I am determined to buy it) and take record down my life.
As time goes by, 20 years has gone. the memory just in my mind,
but when i become forgetable,how can i save the beautiful things?

Rewrite: Time passes by and 20 years have gone; the memories are still in my mind.
But when I become forgetful, how can I save beautiful things?

Now, From now on, I will save my money from now on,and try my best to get a part-time job.
The camera is waiting for me!~

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